But sad to say I think this story is too real for a lot of the readers here, at least the quick fix or happy go lucky crowd.. You mentioned in your final mote you dosed this with reality. I think for many in this category,a little too much.
But for people like me who love taboo stories that really strive to be as real as the genre can allow, I loved it. The turmoil and conflict, the struggle of right and wrong and the Mary/Molly dynamic was intense. Mary really thought Molly existed to an extent.
It was well done and I'll send a private feedback that's more detailed.
Wow, planting your own raves, how cool are you! You should really get someone else to write them, because everything you say gives you away.
Oh, and stop hiding behind women. You're the type of "man" who'd put on a woman's dress to get off the Titanic.
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Anonymous06/25/16
Vicky's story happens between the scene with Candy Came, Nick and Molly and the second Real Moms scene, right?
Candy has big boobs in Mom Will Do Anything.
Also, it's during the months when Nikki Nice was active.
Great, great history... maybe too much porn in the beginning, but all the scenes with Mary and Paul are excellent.
Well, if you pop back in here, you nailed the sneakiest Easter egg. The Candy Came meeting in Mom will do anything. I felt that was so obscure no one would get it. In fact I only decided to do it because I went back and re-read that story myself to get back into the character of Malcolm.
I'm not sure I should congratulate you, or suggest you get a life :)
There's other Easter Eggs as well, but they're easy, surprised they haven't been called out yet
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Anonymous06/25/16
Ohhhhh my gosssshhhhhhhhhh ... so terrific ...
Hi lovecraft68.
Thanks you soooo much for this work of art!
In my humble opinion, this a terrifc work of mom-son incest. Just wooow ... wowww ... wowwww ...
Paul's (who shares a name with Mike Ranger's character in Taboo) user name seems like a nod to arguably the best all time writer in the M/S genre, alwayswantedto?
Right on one. I mentioned Kay in my intro and picked Paul based on the other and far less memorable half of that movie. But Paul's user name was not based on the master of mother son stories lit handle. I dedicated a mom/son story to him last year and used a play on his name in another, but that was not the case this time. sowantmymom was made up on the fly, kind of like everything else I write.
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Anonymous06/25/16
Potential for a sequel.
One thing that I know Mary would want to have is grandkids and to let her son have kids. She is a smart gal so I suspect that she would hint that they need to add a "wife" type for Paul. There is a lot of potential there for them finding and getting such a partner, even if it's one of her former colleagues.
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Anonymous06/25/16
I... I don't know how you do this man. We're all here, browsing a forbidden section of erotic literature, a section which no one would ever dare disclose to anyone, not even their spouse, and you give us a story like this. A story which, for all intents and purposes, is so wrong, but so right. And so real.
If I'm not wrong the last couple of pages are a nod to the Mom Will Do Anything story, and while I would have loved to read what happened in the shoot, I understand it might have sounded repetitive, and perhaps that is why you didn't include it.
I will be very upset if this doesn't get a permanent place in the Hall of Fame, and it was refreshing to read such an amazing story after some of the drivel I've given up on after less than half a page.
I also think that this was perhaps your best story till now. With a close competitor being All I Want For Christmas is Mom.
Lastly, I know you consider alwayswantedto as the king of the M/S genre, but you're both superlative writers. And while his stories were great, in my opinion, you could easily classify them as fantasy. And there were often turns that his stories took that were controversial and were disliked. You blur the lines between reality and fantasy, and for me, that is why you are the better author.
Cheers.
P. S. Please consider adding to the Milf Tails series, and if possible the Mother Son Confessions series as well.
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Anonymous06/25/16
Loved it!
I couldn't put this one down. This actually could be a movie script
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Anonymous06/25/16
More than a Taboo Story
I think this story is outstanding but one of the nuggets of gold is your exploration of the duality of the human psyche that Mary goes through being one person she believed was expected of her (mom/Mary/wife) while denying her other side (Molly). While history is full of examples of the dangers of multiple personalities don't we all play roles expected of us? In the end Mary only finds peace when she acknowledges Molly as part of the whole but only at the expense of violent conflict between her and Paul. If the story went in another direction the destruction of that family would've been brutal.
If I could say one thing critical about Paul is he was too calm almost to the point of unbelievable. I have a similar personality but doubt I could remain as calm and (almost) detached as he. This was, after all, his mother.
I plowed through 29, count them, 29 pages. It took me two days. If it had been any other author I would have given up. Lovecraft68 you did an Outstand job with this piece of work. Keep up the good work,
TBC
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Anonymous06/26/16
Wow that was A GREAT READ!
I couldn't stop reading this story! Such a real feel to the whole scenario! Life doesn't hand use perfect anything! And your writing is absolutly spectacular, fun and erotic. And I have read many of your stories! What are the Easter eggs your referred to? Please let us know! please!
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Anonymous06/26/16
Superb
One of the rare story which i enjoyed reading but sure its damn long. It took me freaking 24 hours to complete e story with stop in between. Kudos. Really really enjoy e whole story line. From forbidden love, to lust, to pure intimacy n lastly a couple together doing a shoot. Hell I would love to read this over and over again. It didnt make me hard but certainly it was a hell of a ride. Thanks dear author
With this epic story, you have just surpassed the great G.H. Lawrence as THE master of the mom/son genre. I've been reading stories at Lit since the site came on line (20 years, +/- ?) , and this is THE best taboo story in all that time. I don't have the literary acumen or knowledge to do justice to plot and character development, or deep psychological analysis, so l will simply agree with others on those points. It simply felt "real". So much more I wish I could say, but unlike you I am not a wordsmith. So I hope a simple, heartfelt " Thank you" will suffice. Wow.
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Anonymous06/27/16
great story
Avery hot read keep on trucking you are, one of the best on this site;tenbears43
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Anonymous06/27/16
Thanks, it's s nice change to read a complete story this long without having to wait months to complete it especially when it's this good.
If this doesn't win you the Nude Day Contest then nothing will! A 29 page story is quite daunting but this was well worth the effort. I don't care what anyone says, LC68 is the absolute master when it comes to mom/son stories and this story proves it!! Unlike most porn stories, this had a great deal of realistic emotion to it. The angst that Mary/Molly went through was heart breaking.
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Anonymous06/28/16
Great Story
The best story of this genre that I've ever read. Great job! Slightly marred by the constant misuse of to/too. Seriously, every time you made that mistake, it ruined it for me just a little bit. But, still, a great effort.
Great characters, realistic behavior, and hot sex sences. Malcolm Stone was perfect recurring character for this story. This was amazing work, definitely among your best. Bravo!
I found the story lacked of sexual tension between Mary and Paul. You wrote 29 pages and in the end they crossed the line too fast.
The first part of the story was all about her life as a porn star and I didn't care for that. Then she goes crazy and rape her son, which wasn't very hot, to finally admitting her true feelings hours later. There wasn't enough 'will they or not' in the story.
Your story is very good and maybe one of a kind but you wrote more exciting ones. And thank you for giving it to us in one go.
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Anonymous07/03/16
great job
I've read alot of stories here and this one was great, I cried twice which shows the emotional connection you were able to make.
I always love your incest stories because they are far more than just stroke stories (though you deliver that aspect in spades too). Molly/Mary is a totally believable and sympathetic character, and I just fell in love with her. But, Paul was revealed to be kind of a sociopathic dick, and I found myself wanting Mary to just kick his ass out and move on with her life. Still a very satisfying read, but not as enjoyable as Mom Will Do Anything, at least for me.
You always make an effort to create belieavable characters and I can't thank you enough for that. Incest stories are all about forbidden relationships, about inner turnoil and you deal mostly with that. I also like your porn storylines. Just don't ever stop writing incest stories, please.
And for people who want quick stories, don't listen to them, there are lot of those here. What we need are more realistic, long, hot stories like this one.
English is not my first language and I read 29 pages in two sittings. Because this story is that good.
I only wished if you wrote at least one mother daughter story. There are no mother daughter stories on Literotica this good. You have b/s, m/s, f/d, but no m/d.
Keep up the good work, you are my favorite author by far.
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Anonymous07/20/16
Loved It!!
I usually dislike mother/son stories but I absolutely loved this one. It had a really terrific plot and I loved the characters. It was just a really great story.
Mother/son incest (real or imaginary) isn't my thing. Actually, neither are the other combinations. I go to this category (and the first time stories) because I like seductions, and incest is a good place to find them.
The thing about this story, though, is that it didn't really have any seduction in it; but it gripped me enough to get me to read the whole thing in one sitting.
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Anonymous07/25/16
Just great
I like how you left with a couple of way to keep the story going and to make a hole new story line .1 That you left with so Paul could make money writing story lines for movies 2 left with out the movies being film . Love your work looking forward to reading more .thank you so much
Everyone who voted and helped make this story the second place winner in the Nude Day contest.
Many may not know this, but Molly Minx is the first incest story to place in a contest in four years and there was only one in the three years prior to that.
I'm proud to have brought a W to my favorite category. Could not have done that without the support of you, the family fun loving readers. So again, thank you. We did this together.
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Anonymous08/09/16
Long but worth it
You know it is good when even though you havent got the time to read 29 pages, you keep a tab open to read it in the free time you have. Well done on your deserved placing in the contest.
A few typos I saw along the way as I'm a slow but thorough reader that made me pause to scan the line again, a proof reader before publishing would be perfect but know time constraints might have been an issue with the contest.
I think I've fallen in love with Molly. This would have to be one of the most believable and realistic stories I have ever read and every time I re-read it I discover something that I missed previously. I did however think that Paul was a little too calm about his mom doing porn again. If that was my mom I could probably handle what she did in her younger days, but to do as many movies as Molly did in the last six months with guys the same age as Paul and having orgasms while pretending that they were her sons should have been too much for him. I think he should have reacted as he did in Molly's dream, but being deeply hurt than angry. At one stage I thought you may have got Paul to do his video with Nikki Nice when Molly spat the dummy at Malcolm's film studio, considering the fact that Nikkl had no hesitation whatsoever in fucking her own son. Speaking of which, if this story is written in the present time has Nikki Nice come out of retirement because she stopped doing porn about five years ago according to my calculations.
I love this story and my heart starts pounding every time I sit down to read it. LC, I believe you have enough characters and personalities here to start a Porn Star Moms series. I hope that becomes a reality.
im not into older woman/younger guy and im generally not into incest erotica although there are the occasional ones i come across but they, and your story, have more than SEX , the have excellent writing and depth & something more interesting than just 'this is hot coz its taboo'. yours had me laughing, shocked , intrigued, had me feeling like i was learning something & watching molly/marys character development. then it got to the...rape? ill call it the first sex scene with molly & Paul and that blew me the fuck away with raw emotions. And for some reason after that i was disappointed to keep reading into the loving, meaningful incest sex and ending...because that seemed too easy, a cop out after the ride your writing had taken me on. So, i think you write fantastically for the most part but yeh im bit up & down in my overall feelings now
Well written, great main character. My only issue is I agree with one of the other commenters. I hated Paul. He really seemed indifferent to her anguish and was totally blind to anything but his own wants. While realistic and well written, I just hate him and really didn't want him to get what he wanted.
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Anonymous09/05/16
Awesome plot lovecraft68
You put a lot of emotion on Molly!
I love when you make vivid characters who looked alive.If you play with emotions(jealousy,despair,passion...) you will always hook up your readers.
What an awesome story! I've loved reading it. I've waited until I had the time to finish it in one go, and it was worth every single word. Stories with a proper build up are my favourites, and this one was fantastic in all regards. Don't let anyone telling the story is too long annoy you. If they want to read shorter stories, the site is full of them. Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the amazing work. ^__^
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Anonymous09/11/16
You did it again
Great story as usual. I gave it five stars, but same old caveat: needs editing. I'll send a private message.
JJ
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Anonymous09/12/16
Excellent! 1st time I've left a comment
Great story. I had to read it all the way thru. Found myself really pulled into the characters - - frustrated with mary/molly, hoping for Paul, etc. I love stories that aren't just about sex and you did a great job of that. Was even annoyed with molly for taking so long to figure out what she wanted. ALSO, RE: EASTER EGGS. WAS IT THAT YOU CALLED JOHN JAMES A COUPLE/FEW TIMES?
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Anonymous10/05/16
I read to the end despite myself
Mother/son stuff is definitely not my thing, so I battled to keep my mind open for the sake of the story telling. It is the quality of your writing that kept me on board. I think you can write any sexy story well, so I hope you write more traditional stories too. Then get them properly edited. This one was short book length like some I have purchased off the shelf at Barnes and Noble. Why you are not already making a living at this I am not sure. I look forward to broader choices in the future.
I've just stayed up **way** past my bedtime to finish this, so this comment is going to be shorter than the story deserves. You've long been one of my favorite authors here, but this is easily your best. My only complaint was the timing. I'm not sure how many other stories has Malcolm in them. The one I remember was called something like "Mommy will do anything," Also one of my all time favorite stories. (Please for the love of Christmas write a story where that mother gives her son her Ass. I know she didn't want it filmed, but It bothers me that as far as I'm aware he hasn't owned it yet). I think this story would have worked better though if you timed it before that story. Malcolm should have known better for the Brian shoot after the other one. You did a great job wrapping this one up. As much as I like Mary / Molly and Paul, I feel like their story is complete. Best build up of any Incest story I ever read. I like it best when the son takes control, but the dramatic scene with her forcing herself on him was perfect for this story and was needed for her to accept certain truths about her life. It was all amazingly done. If you ever do write for money, please make sure we know where to buy them. I'll have no problem paying to see your work.
English
DL?
Is there a way to download this story? Cause 29 pages can't be done in one sitting.
I don't Know
When I read your stories I want to love them but how wimpy the sons are it really ruins it for me.
A really epic piece!
But sad to say I think this story is too real for a lot of the readers here, at least the quick fix or happy go lucky crowd.. You mentioned in your final mote you dosed this with reality. I think for many in this category,a little too much.
But for people like me who love taboo stories that really strive to be as real as the genre can allow, I loved it. The turmoil and conflict, the struggle of right and wrong and the Mary/Molly dynamic was intense. Mary really thought Molly existed to an extent.
It was well done and I'll send a private feedback that's more detailed.
Amazing
Long M/S stories are the best. Great work!
Ha ha ha
This is so funny.
Wow, planting your own raves, how cool are you! You should really get someone else to write them, because everything you say gives you away.
Oh, and stop hiding behind women. You're the type of "man" who'd put on a woman's dress to get off the Titanic.
Vicky's story happens between the scene with Candy Came, Nick and Molly and the second Real Moms scene, right?
Candy has big boobs in Mom Will Do Anything.
Also, it's during the months when Nikki Nice was active.
Great, great history... maybe too much porn in the beginning, but all the scenes with Mary and Paul are excellent.
Give it up for Anonymous
Well, if you pop back in here, you nailed the sneakiest Easter egg. The Candy Came meeting in Mom will do anything. I felt that was so obscure no one would get it. In fact I only decided to do it because I went back and re-read that story myself to get back into the character of Malcolm.
I'm not sure I should congratulate you, or suggest you get a life :)
There's other Easter Eggs as well, but they're easy, surprised they haven't been called out yet
Ohhhhh my gosssshhhhhhhhhh ... so terrific ...
Hi lovecraft68.
Thanks you soooo much for this work of art!
In my humble opinion, this a terrifc work of mom-son incest. Just wooow ... wowww ... wowwww ...
Just go on with your great writing.
Is it just me?
Paul's (who shares a name with Mike Ranger's character in Taboo) user name seems like a nod to arguably the best all time writer in the M/S genre, alwayswantedto?
Chuckyt
Right on one. I mentioned Kay in my intro and picked Paul based on the other and far less memorable half of that movie. But Paul's user name was not based on the master of mother son stories lit handle. I dedicated a mom/son story to him last year and used a play on his name in another, but that was not the case this time. sowantmymom was made up on the fly, kind of like everything else I write.
Potential for a sequel.
One thing that I know Mary would want to have is grandkids and to let her son have kids. She is a smart gal so I suspect that she would hint that they need to add a "wife" type for Paul. There is a lot of potential there for them finding and getting such a partner, even if it's one of her former colleagues.
I... I don't know how you do this man. We're all here, browsing a forbidden section of erotic literature, a section which no one would ever dare disclose to anyone, not even their spouse, and you give us a story like this. A story which, for all intents and purposes, is so wrong, but so right. And so real.
If I'm not wrong the last couple of pages are a nod to the Mom Will Do Anything story, and while I would have loved to read what happened in the shoot, I understand it might have sounded repetitive, and perhaps that is why you didn't include it.
I will be very upset if this doesn't get a permanent place in the Hall of Fame, and it was refreshing to read such an amazing story after some of the drivel I've given up on after less than half a page.
I also think that this was perhaps your best story till now. With a close competitor being All I Want For Christmas is Mom.
Lastly, I know you consider alwayswantedto as the king of the M/S genre, but you're both superlative writers. And while his stories were great, in my opinion, you could easily classify them as fantasy. And there were often turns that his stories took that were controversial and were disliked. You blur the lines between reality and fantasy, and for me, that is why you are the better author.
Cheers.
P. S. Please consider adding to the Milf Tails series, and if possible the Mother Son Confessions series as well.
Loved it!
I couldn't put this one down. This actually could be a movie script
More than a Taboo Story
I think this story is outstanding but one of the nuggets of gold is your exploration of the duality of the human psyche that Mary goes through being one person she believed was expected of her (mom/Mary/wife) while denying her other side (Molly). While history is full of examples of the dangers of multiple personalities don't we all play roles expected of us? In the end Mary only finds peace when she acknowledges Molly as part of the whole but only at the expense of violent conflict between her and Paul. If the story went in another direction the destruction of that family would've been brutal.
If I could say one thing critical about Paul is he was too calm almost to the point of unbelievable. I have a similar personality but doubt I could remain as calm and (almost) detached as he. This was, after all, his mother.
Wel Now
I plowed through 29, count them, 29 pages. It took me two days. If it had been any other author I would have given up. Lovecraft68 you did an Outstand job with this piece of work. Keep up the good work,
TBC
Wow that was A GREAT READ!
I couldn't stop reading this story! Such a real feel to the whole scenario! Life doesn't hand use perfect anything! And your writing is absolutly spectacular, fun and erotic. And I have read many of your stories! What are the Easter eggs your referred to? Please let us know! please!
Superb
One of the rare story which i enjoyed reading but sure its damn long. It took me freaking 24 hours to complete e story with stop in between. Kudos. Really really enjoy e whole story line. From forbidden love, to lust, to pure intimacy n lastly a couple together doing a shoot. Hell I would love to read this over and over again. It didnt make me hard but certainly it was a hell of a ride. Thanks dear author
Best mom/son story
The best mom/son story I've ever read. The amount of character development and angst was simply incredible. Loved it.
i love the concept
thanks for making an effort to give us a story instead of just grunting and fucking.
The King is dead, long live the new King...
With this epic story, you have just surpassed the great G.H. Lawrence as THE master of the mom/son genre. I've been reading stories at Lit since the site came on line (20 years, +/- ?) , and this is THE best taboo story in all that time. I don't have the literary acumen or knowledge to do justice to plot and character development, or deep psychological analysis, so l will simply agree with others on those points. It simply felt "real". So much more I wish I could say, but unlike you I am not a wordsmith. So I hope a simple, heartfelt " Thank you" will suffice. Wow.
great story
Avery hot read keep on trucking you are, one of the best on this site;tenbears43
Thanks, it's s nice change to read a complete story this long without having to wait months to complete it especially when it's this good.
If this doesn't win you the Nude Day Contest then nothing will! A 29 page story is quite daunting but this was well worth the effort. I don't care what anyone says, LC68 is the absolute master when it comes to mom/son stories and this story proves it!! Unlike most porn stories, this had a great deal of realistic emotion to it. The angst that Mary/Molly went through was heart breaking.
Great Story
The best story of this genre that I've ever read. Great job! Slightly marred by the constant misuse of to/too. Seriously, every time you made that mistake, it ruined it for me just a little bit. But, still, a great effort.
Simply amazing
Great characters, realistic behavior, and hot sex sences. Malcolm Stone was perfect recurring character for this story. This was amazing work, definitely among your best. Bravo!
Not sexy enough
I found the story lacked of sexual tension between Mary and Paul. You wrote 29 pages and in the end they crossed the line too fast.
The first part of the story was all about her life as a porn star and I didn't care for that. Then she goes crazy and rape her son, which wasn't very hot, to finally admitting her true feelings hours later. There wasn't enough 'will they or not' in the story.
Your story is very good and maybe one of a kind but you wrote more exciting ones. And thank you for giving it to us in one go.
great job
I've read alot of stories here and this one was great, I cried twice which shows the emotional connection you were able to make.
Deja vu?
Nice to see Malcom make another appearance. I loved "Mom will do anything" but Molly got a butt load more cash than Vicky!
Great story, but...
I always love your incest stories because they are far more than just stroke stories (though you deliver that aspect in spades too). Molly/Mary is a totally believable and sympathetic character, and I just fell in love with her. But, Paul was revealed to be kind of a sociopathic dick, and I found myself wanting Mary to just kick his ass out and move on with her life. Still a very satisfying read, but not as enjoyable as Mom Will Do Anything, at least for me.
One of the greates incest stories ever
You always make an effort to create belieavable characters and I can't thank you enough for that. Incest stories are all about forbidden relationships, about inner turnoil and you deal mostly with that. I also like your porn storylines. Just don't ever stop writing incest stories, please.
And for people who want quick stories, don't listen to them, there are lot of those here. What we need are more realistic, long, hot stories like this one.
English is not my first language and I read 29 pages in two sittings. Because this story is that good.
I only wished if you wrote at least one mother daughter story. There are no mother daughter stories on Literotica this good. You have b/s, m/s, f/d, but no m/d.
Keep up the good work, you are my favorite author by far.
Loved It!!
I usually dislike mother/son stories but I absolutely loved this one. It had a really terrific plot and I loved the characters. It was just a really great story.
Wowzers - Congrats
Wowzers, what a ride. Great job.
Zoo
Really enjoyed it
Mother/son incest (real or imaginary) isn't my thing. Actually, neither are the other combinations. I go to this category (and the first time stories) because I like seductions, and incest is a good place to find them.
The thing about this story, though, is that it didn't really have any seduction in it; but it gripped me enough to get me to read the whole thing in one sitting.
Just great
I like how you left with a couple of way to keep the story going and to make a hole new story line .1 That you left with so Paul could make money writing story lines for movies 2 left with out the movies being film . Love your work looking forward to reading more .thank you so much
You made incest, something that can already easily be creepy and weird, sound even weirder and creepier.
long - long read, but i Loved it,
found no Easter Eggs, wish I had
A belated thank you to...
Everyone who voted and helped make this story the second place winner in the Nude Day contest.
Many may not know this, but Molly Minx is the first incest story to place in a contest in four years and there was only one in the three years prior to that.
I'm proud to have brought a W to my favorite category. Could not have done that without the support of you, the family fun loving readers. So again, thank you. We did this together.
Long but worth it
You know it is good when even though you havent got the time to read 29 pages, you keep a tab open to read it in the free time you have. Well done on your deserved placing in the contest.
A few typos I saw along the way as I'm a slow but thorough reader that made me pause to scan the line again, a proof reader before publishing would be perfect but know time constraints might have been an issue with the contest.
What can I say.
I think I've fallen in love with Molly. This would have to be one of the most believable and realistic stories I have ever read and every time I re-read it I discover something that I missed previously. I did however think that Paul was a little too calm about his mom doing porn again. If that was my mom I could probably handle what she did in her younger days, but to do as many movies as Molly did in the last six months with guys the same age as Paul and having orgasms while pretending that they were her sons should have been too much for him. I think he should have reacted as he did in Molly's dream, but being deeply hurt than angry. At one stage I thought you may have got Paul to do his video with Nikki Nice when Molly spat the dummy at Malcolm's film studio, considering the fact that Nikkl had no hesitation whatsoever in fucking her own son. Speaking of which, if this story is written in the present time has Nikki Nice come out of retirement because she stopped doing porn about five years ago according to my calculations.
I love this story and my heart starts pounding every time I sit down to read it. LC, I believe you have enough characters and personalities here to start a Porn Star Moms series. I hope that becomes a reality.
enjoyable
im not into older woman/younger guy and im generally not into incest erotica although there are the occasional ones i come across but they, and your story, have more than SEX , the have excellent writing and depth & something more interesting than just 'this is hot coz its taboo'. yours had me laughing, shocked , intrigued, had me feeling like i was learning something & watching molly/marys character development. then it got to the...rape? ill call it the first sex scene with molly & Paul and that blew me the fuck away with raw emotions. And for some reason after that i was disappointed to keep reading into the loving, meaningful incest sex and ending...because that seemed too easy, a cop out after the ride your writing had taken me on. So, i think you write fantastically for the most part but yeh im bit up & down in my overall feelings now
Great as always....
Well written, great main character. My only issue is I agree with one of the other commenters. I hated Paul. He really seemed indifferent to her anguish and was totally blind to anything but his own wants. While realistic and well written, I just hate him and really didn't want him to get what he wanted.
Awesome plot lovecraft68
You put a lot of emotion on Molly!
I love when you make vivid characters who looked alive.If you play with emotions(jealousy,despair,passion...) you will always hook up your readers.
^__^
What an awesome story! I've loved reading it. I've waited until I had the time to finish it in one go, and it was worth every single word. Stories with a proper build up are my favourites, and this one was fantastic in all regards. Don't let anyone telling the story is too long annoy you. If they want to read shorter stories, the site is full of them. Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the amazing work. ^__^
You did it again
Great story as usual. I gave it five stars, but same old caveat: needs editing. I'll send a private message.
JJ
Excellent! 1st time I've left a comment
Great story. I had to read it all the way thru. Found myself really pulled into the characters - - frustrated with mary/molly, hoping for Paul, etc. I love stories that aren't just about sex and you did a great job of that. Was even annoyed with molly for taking so long to figure out what she wanted. ALSO, RE: EASTER EGGS. WAS IT THAT YOU CALLED JOHN JAMES A COUPLE/FEW TIMES?
I read to the end despite myself
Mother/son stuff is definitely not my thing, so I battled to keep my mind open for the sake of the story telling. It is the quality of your writing that kept me on board. I think you can write any sexy story well, so I hope you write more traditional stories too. Then get them properly edited. This one was short book length like some I have purchased off the shelf at Barnes and Noble. Why you are not already making a living at this I am not sure. I look forward to broader choices in the future.
Was happy to see Malcolm again
I've just stayed up **way** past my bedtime to finish this, so this comment is going to be shorter than the story deserves. You've long been one of my favorite authors here, but this is easily your best. My only complaint was the timing. I'm not sure how many other stories has Malcolm in them. The one I remember was called something like "Mommy will do anything," Also one of my all time favorite stories. (Please for the love of Christmas write a story where that mother gives her son her Ass. I know she didn't want it filmed, but It bothers me that as far as I'm aware he hasn't owned it yet). I think this story would have worked better though if you timed it before that story. Malcolm should have known better for the Brian shoot after the other one. You did a great job wrapping this one up. As much as I like Mary / Molly and Paul, I feel like their story is complete. Best build up of any Incest story I ever read. I like it best when the son takes control, but the dramatic scene with her forcing herself on him was perfect for this story and was needed for her to accept certain truths about her life. It was all amazingly done. If you ever do write for money, please make sure we know where to buy them. I'll have no problem paying to see your work.
Pacing issue
You spend too much time on the unnecessary porn shooting scenes, then rush Paul's character development and the climax resolution.
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That says it all. Write some stories and show the people who actually post stories here how its done.
Oustanding!
I've got SFA interest in mother son, and I just binge read this whole thing.
That should tell you a bunch about your writing ;)
Plus I came 4 times.
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