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wish and vision before sleep

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous04/08/04

this will stay

eyes closed
wakeful, almost
words take me back rewind into dreams
imagining scenes over
changing hands again and again

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by YDD04/08/04

Wishy watchy

Which is the wish and which the vision?

I like the first stanza much more than the second.
"I have memories
able to hold in my hand
passed back and forth
left to right to other"

Good lines.

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by jthserra04/10/04

A subtle beauty here...

such gentle language frames this relationship. Very nice...

jim : )

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