While Mommy's Gone

Please....

Just shut the fuck up! Did you write this with your red crayon? What a complete waste of time trying to read this rubble!

Editing. Proofing. You need this bad

Sorry but it's true. While the story starts out alright, you really just lack pacing. The lack proper grammar. And fall intot his fantasy self-fulfillment apparently.

Hott

I think your story is very Hott! Fuck all the negative comments! Please give us more.

not ........

just "not" worth the time it took to read it.!***
wasted my time on this one...!^^

Some good ideas

This story has a lot of good elements but could be put together better. Keep writing you have good potential.

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Hey, everybody! Stop the "asshole" stories!

stepfather constantly brings the:

whores inside their house so he could literally fuck them ....................

HMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM MM - - - the whores

should include [ his~niece\his~nieces . son~gf.\son~wife // son's~gfs.\son's~wives

. stepdaughter's~friend\stepdaughter's~friends ] ..... make sure you make

all thee other stories this franchise much longer also make sure that you give

complete details about everything

nice!

could use a little editing, but I like your premise, and it's pretty focused. Keep on!

This made my pussy get so swollen and wet I'm afraid if I touch it I'll cum before I want to :( could've dealt w out the drunkenness tho..