Just Trying to Stay Warm

Totally ruined

Was so hot till the pissing in the mouth. That ruined it for me. *

Not completely bad

Not the worst siblings fucking story I ever read but that pissing in his mouth was hard to swallow, no pun intended. A bit more backstory and a bit more emotions would do the story good, and if you can't leave the pissplay out please do put up the warning beforehand.

Still a solid 3*.

Nonsense

When you grow up and actually get into bed with a girl, you will learn what absolute twaddle this story is.

I'd say that this author needs to "piss off"...

... but he'd probably enjoy it.

Regardless, I won't be reading anything by this author, again. I'll just scroll to the end of the story and give it the solid 1 star that it deserves.

Loved the peeing

Loved the story but was short.

HATE THE PEEING

To me the drinking the pee was a HUGE TURNOFF. A golden shower is one thing, but drinking pee is gross.

Piss off.

Dude you have a disgusting fixation about pee.

Jackass comments

This story wasn't great. Needs alot more detail and maybe some actual dialogue. The comments saying you are sick are ridiculous though. Who says that while they are reading incest literotica?

Golden story

Loved the piss was hot!

Yes, a little peeing is okay but not a lot of it .....very good brother & sister sex to completion .... she had played him. Tomorrow night on the beach he should return the favor by eating her out, screwing her well and cumming all over her after the pee treatment she did to him. Fair is fair ........ maybe, she'll like the cum spray and want to do it more and they both win w/o any peeing ?? Thanks.

yuck! piss

was a good read until you had her brother drink her piss, that was a total turn off ...if you have a piss fetish you should have posted it in the fetish category. not everyone likes water sports.

Okayish

Came for piss and incest, was only slightly disappointed by the low overall quality.

poor

Proofread your work and get an editor.

I need to be I side you

What on earth does that mean? Proof read !

Practically Unreadable

Editor!

Hot enough

This was a decent, short, down 'n' dirty stroke story. It didn't need a backstory, or a lot of character development. It was all about a one night sexual encounter, and as such, it was fine.

The few errors/typos didn't justify the amount of vitriol being spewed about them. It may have been due to poor typing skills, or a next-to-useless auto-correct. Although, I do agree that a proofreading or two could (and should) have caught them. Still, I've read lots worse on Lit. These were relatively few and minor mistakes by comparison.

You might want to consider doing a short disclaimer before stories that cover more than one "taboo" sex act. Chances are, if you'd have put this under "Fetish" (as one comment suggested), someone would have complained that they weren't expecting incest. Same thing it you'd have listed it under "Anal". A disclaimer paragraph at the beginning could warn people of subject matter they may find offensive. In this case, incest, piss and anal.

Still, I enjoyed the story and would like to see a follow-up chapter on the next night's "sex on the beach". A moonlit night with a chance of "showers". ;-) Lots of water at hand to wash off afterwards.