And that's all you have to say about a hot, erotic story like that? You pick out ONE detail and latch onto it?
Jeez, man, you need to relax and let your imagination go for a while.
But just for the record, it is possible for the male human penis to push past the female cervyx. We're only talking about an inch or so, maybe less, but it is possible.
The cervix part was a little out of place but not too distracting. I really like this story line. It has great descriptions and is super hot. I love how they talk to each other. This was my first time getting off since I had my clit pierced. I needed this story. I can't wait to see a follow up.
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To TwOcrOws
And that's all you have to say about a hot, erotic story like that? You pick out ONE detail and latch onto it?
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Maybe because I liked the rest of the story, and thought it would be better without it?
Maybe I'm not the only one that needs to lighten up?
Maybe you should try being a little clearer in your comments. Titling the first comment "BS" isn't a good indicator that you liked the story, and simply saying that "it would be a better story without that" is just as vague and can easily be taken as a negative comment.
Here's an idea: try saying "good story! Just one thing, though..." and see what that gets you.
Glad you liked the story! If you want more of the same kind, check out my blog. I've been writing for about 6 years now and EVERYTHING I've ever written is on my blog. I'm especially proud of a series I did called "The Seduction of Rob." That one is my personal favorite. "Porn Star Dad" is a close second, but that series is as yet unfinished. Lost the initiative to write in the incest genre about 3 years ago and just haven't gotten it back - yet. Time will tell.
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Anonymous11/27/16
Enjoyable story
Thought the characters and their personalities were realistic and engaging. Danni was simply cute, and Steve - the perfect combination of an innocent, yet good kid, totally out of his element and wanting to fit in. Story put a smile on my face and made me reminisce about my initial reaction to college. I was more frightened than Steve and felt totally out of place, wondering how I would cope in a much larger school, with people from all over the country, with attitudes, memories, and experiences (probably) totally different from me. (I grew up in cosmopolitan Honolulu, where there's a lot of Asians, very few African Americans, and a lot of mixed races - where you're never more than 45 minutes from a beach. I imagine that's a totally different growing up experience from someone on a farm, in say, Idaho - though I became good friends with that person.I visited her family's farm on spring break, and was totally surprised when they drank raw milk and told me they didn't lock their doors - no need to worry about thieves, because other than neighboring farms, no one else lived out there. As a city kid, we always locked our doors - was dumbfounded yet pleased that at least in some parts of America, burglary was not a concern. That was in the 80's - wonder if that's still true today. If not, another part of small-town Americana, sadly lost.
luv2read2
English
past the cervix? BS
A big cock will not push past the cervix.
Ram into it and bruise it, sometimes badly enough to make sex painful for days, that is what happens.
It would be a better story without that.
To TwOcrOws
And that's all you have to say about a hot, erotic story like that? You pick out ONE detail and latch onto it?
Jeez, man, you need to relax and let your imagination go for a while.
But just for the record, it is possible for the male human penis to push past the female cervyx. We're only talking about an inch or so, maybe less, but it is possible.
Love it!
The cervix part was a little out of place but not too distracting. I really like this story line. It has great descriptions and is super hot. I love how they talk to each other. This was my first time getting off since I had my clit pierced. I needed this story. I can't wait to see a follow up.
Very erotic
Wow, that was a very erotic vignette in a sweet innocent way. Thanks for sharing.
@Original_Aramis 07/06/16
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To TwOcrOws
And that's all you have to say about a hot, erotic story like that? You pick out ONE detail and latch onto it?
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Maybe because I liked the rest of the story, and thought it would be better without it?
Maybe I'm not the only one that needs to lighten up?
To Tw0Cr0ws
Maybe you should try being a little clearer in your comments. Titling the first comment "BS" isn't a good indicator that you liked the story, and simply saying that "it would be a better story without that" is just as vague and can easily be taken as a negative comment.
Here's an idea: try saying "good story! Just one thing, though..." and see what that gets you.
Glad you liked the story.
Glad you liked the story, John!
Jilian
Glad you liked the story! If you want more of the same kind, check out my blog. I've been writing for about 6 years now and EVERYTHING I've ever written is on my blog. I'm especially proud of a series I did called "The Seduction of Rob." That one is my personal favorite. "Porn Star Dad" is a close second, but that series is as yet unfinished. Lost the initiative to write in the incest genre about 3 years ago and just haven't gotten it back - yet. Time will tell.
Enjoyable story
Thought the characters and their personalities were realistic and engaging. Danni was simply cute, and Steve - the perfect combination of an innocent, yet good kid, totally out of his element and wanting to fit in. Story put a smile on my face and made me reminisce about my initial reaction to college. I was more frightened than Steve and felt totally out of place, wondering how I would cope in a much larger school, with people from all over the country, with attitudes, memories, and experiences (probably) totally different from me. (I grew up in cosmopolitan Honolulu, where there's a lot of Asians, very few African Americans, and a lot of mixed races - where you're never more than 45 minutes from a beach. I imagine that's a totally different growing up experience from someone on a farm, in say, Idaho - though I became good friends with that person.I visited her family's farm on spring break, and was totally surprised when they drank raw milk and told me they didn't lock their doors - no need to worry about thieves, because other than neighboring farms, no one else lived out there. As a city kid, we always locked our doors - was dumbfounded yet pleased that at least in some parts of America, burglary was not a concern. That was in the 80's - wonder if that's still true today. If not, another part of small-town Americana, sadly lost.
luv2read2
Glad you liked the story, and I hope the memories it brought back to you were good ones!
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