When this girl finally has sex it's going to open a flood gate, can't wait to read it
by
Anonymous07/07/16
Amazing build-up
Part 2 is even better than the first. I jerked both times and just can't wait for more. a few typos, but if the author is as turned on while writing, I can look past it.
Good job! Welcome to Lit!
by
Anonymous07/08/16
Cousin Mike?
I say when cousin Mike is well again and cast-free, bring his dark good looks to Lily and let them explore each other. He ought be a young man with some chest hair and muscles, and a big cock just waiting to be serviced!
English
So good
When this girl finally has sex it's going to open a flood gate, can't wait to read it
Amazing build-up
Part 2 is even better than the first. I jerked both times and just can't wait for more. a few typos, but if the author is as turned on while writing, I can look past it.
Good job! Welcome to Lit!
Cousin Mike?
I say when cousin Mike is well again and cast-free, bring his dark good looks to Lily and let them explore each other. He ought be a young man with some chest hair and muscles, and a big cock just waiting to be serviced!
What I've gathered...
Gay sex, kiddy porn and jerking people off.
Misuse of the dash. Use the speech marks, makes more sense.
Get an editor.
Love it!
Keep writing
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