by My Erotic Tail
One more layer peeled for us to adore...Layer by layer you give us much enjoyment.
the rhyme in this... simple and highly effectual.
all ladies should wear red ;)
It is completely terrible. Childish, sing-song rhythm, unintelligent, lacking in depth, poorly executed. Tasteless image. Utterly reprehensible. I apologize, but it's true.
This is good. I would like to see it a little longer, perhaps alittle more at the end.
Sorry...This is shit. This is not a good poem. It is simplistic, and uninteresting. Sorry, gotta be honest.
I'm still trying to figure out if you are really serious in submitting this or if you're trying to see how many people will actually read all three verses and compliment you on it. I am not one of them. It's juvenile, bland, meaningless, and between the nursery rhyme and that ridiculous picture it reminds me of an '80's condom ad.
No quaint words ~ the guy's wife is wearing red ~ he can't wait to get into bed...Okay! is this to be continued - or what? Stirs the sensuous imagination.