And the Winner Is?

I like your stories because they are real. not to many men out there want to watch their wives being fucked or encourage them to do so. all a sickness. You keep it real

Love Story for Mouth Breathers

Stay or go ? It doesn't matter as long as couple in story don't breed and warp impressionable young infant minds . No kids ... not even puppies.

Seems fair for the most part

But honestly I'd have had her sign some kind of post-nup to make sure she wouldn't financially rape him in another divorce.

realistic

Seems like a fairly realistic reconciliation. Usually in a story like this once the spouse has a chance to see that the fantasy isn't reality, they want to come back. In real life, assuming I could overcome my anger, I would definitely be in the 'you gotta sign a post-nup' camp.

Was going to give it a 3, since I normally am not into reconciliations, but I like your work for the most part. 4*

I like a little more meat with my potatoes

but it wasn't bad. I gave it 4 stars

I kinda wish Mario had shown up

Well , it was I guess a slice of real life, but it wasn't a " Sticks to your ribs" story.
I could of sworn Matt Moreau was making a return with the original description you used to set it up.
There wasn't anything glaringly wrong with the storyline , hard working everyman who got the girl of his dreams, but apparently she had a different dream.
A few quibbles, first the passion seemed to just be lacking. I could actually see where she was coming from on that part. I mean he's married for , what , at least fifteen years and is still living with his mother ?
She really should have stirred a stink over that part alone.
Throw in the little mind games that he played on her regarding Charlotte , not very endearing , I must say. He is a petty man, it seems to me.
And Arlene isn't a prize herself. She was definitely holding back herself. She should have given him some clue that he should be , just more.
Both adults were kinda shallow I'm afraid.
Only the Daughter seemed to show any likeable characteristics.
I'm torn , it's not a full 4 star tale, but it's better than a 3. And since I can't give it the 3.6 that I would , and grading on the curve
4*'s

typical carvohi

wimp story 1*

WHEN ROSES STOP SMELLING SO SWEET

its time to replant and fertilize. TK U MLJ LV NV

Damn

I call bullshit. If someone cares to know why just ask.

no rating

My god, I felt like I was reading about two overgrown teenagers.

Good to see Carvohi again

Nice flash story. Very real. Very human. Real people are not good and evil, black and white. Real people people must live in a multidimensional complex nonlinear world where big decisions have broad ramifications. Real people have warts and pimples. No BTB or RAAC here - just real people living in a real world where dreams are superceded by reality - but once you come to terms with that, life is tolerable and even enjoyable. I too expected retribution for Arlene and "happily ever after" with Carol, but in the end, am pleasantly gratified with your outcome and what it signifies - not acquiescence, but acceptance.

By the way, good to see your submission - I've missed your work, and just yesterday opened your submissions folder to find something to reread, but ran out of time, and had to get to work. Your timing is impeccable!

As always, thanks for your submissions.

Quite sad

No real love there and no prospect of it ever appearing. That´s why she didn´t want to have kids with him and why her leaving didn´t hurt him too much as long as the daughter stays. Things will get worse when the daughter leaves home. Good, realistic story though.

A slice of life, and quite a sad life at that.
Charlotte has hope for a real future and I hope she makes the most of it.
Calvin deserves better, and surely must gave wanted to father a child of his own.
Arlene .....a life living on easy street....... lucky girl.
Jason. 4 years in the navy ? Where was he the rest of the time ? Thought Arlene would ask that.

Decision?

A nice twist to leave the decision to the daughter. But realistically, it would be grossly unfair to saddle a teenager with a heavy decision like this.

OH DEAR

Sorry, not for me. The daughter had more guts than the husband.

Thanks for the entertainment

I don't make morality judgements about stories, that wouldn't be fair to the author IMO. I didn't think I would enjoy your story mostly because of all the bad grammar. I almost stopped reading it when the grammar got too bad. Then I realized I wasn't reading YOUR bad grammar. It was written in "Jed Clampett's" PoV. I had a good laugh and kept reading. You did a superb job of letting the reader peek into the mind of your protagonist, showing us all of his feelings. I'm not usually into what I call "hillbilly redneck" tales but in this case I was strangely entertained. It was like watching an unusually good movie on the Lifetime Movie Channel. Most of those are not good but maybe 5% are. I ended up being glad I read your story. I liked that it had redemption in it, morality aside. Even in really gross horror stories, when there is some kind of redemption (meaning some good comes out of all the bad), it makes for a satisfying as well as entertaining read. If we had a 10 point scale I would rate it 9.4. As is I give it four stars and thank you for posting it.

so he is happy to at best 2nd rate

He will never be number one her the slut's life nor in the daughters eyes now.
Hell he is only number 2 in his eyes.
so, what the hell big deal it is only a story

3*s

Gave you 3*s. It was a short story that was a rice cake.
It makes some noise as you eat it. Takes a while to chew and swallow. But there isn't much more to it.
Thanks for the post.


AMerryman

In Jed Clampett land....

This qualifies as "short and sweet".
A quick exercise of the gaskets, may be...
But, does it hold water?

Well the writing is there. Allowing us to picture perfectly and even "know" these characters? Sure thing. We don't have to 'like' them per say, but only understand their motivations.

I would agree that Calvin got a raw deal. But it WAS one of his own making. The RAAC felt forced in some ways, and natural in others. It was a hard call, But I decided to focus on the best aspect of the story message:

All this time, Calvin was a second best choice for Arlene in her mind, but not in reality. Yet the reality is that for Calvin, Arlene was always a second best choice as well, but she stayed that in reality. If he had managed to hook up properly with Carolyn? Who knows? But the problem, or rather the tension of the plot, is that it has taken 15 years and getting cheated on for months, for him to figure it out.

Oh well. I have to say thanks very much, Carvohi! A story from you has been long overdue. It really was nice to spot your name in the new submissions. Anything else coming up in the pipeline soon? If so, can't wait! Till then....

I Don't Think So

"Mostly I think life is about compromise; compromise and learning to be happy with what we've got. I think it ended up pretty well for Calvin, Arlene, and of course Charlotte, especially Charlotte."

Compromise? Where was Arlene's end of that compromise? She cheated like the little slut that she was, then she realized that she had left a hard working PA, good husband and good father for a military lifer that would never amount to anything close to what she had at home. She ran home and weaseled her way back in, but what compromise did she make? He on the other hand: married a pregnant slut and saved her from abortion or single motherhood, she never gave him his own genetic daughter, she never worked, he busted his ass for his family and was a good father and husband and she repaid that by fucking the old loser from high school. She NEVER "compromised". He did nothing but compromise, beyond love and forgiveness - he was a doormat. This at it's heart; is a humiliation and cuckold story. From this website, I have learned that there are people who actually like humiliation and abuse. By definition, these are bad things and the desires of a sick mind. The only other possibility is even worse: The idea that he was saving his wife from herself, from her sin...Kind of like he was her savior in some kind of tale of self righteousness run amok.

A story about people people with a lesser past and even a lesser future...

A story about people people with a lesser past and maybe an even lesser future...But these two had one "ace of spades" in their life: They had created a daughter to be a good woman and a woman with a greater future (she is the real winner)...And that was what made it possible for them to get back together again...The real question in this story is: After their daughter leaves the nest and they found themselves alone, will they survive as a couple? We may assume that they will and have a better future than past...but only time will tell...the lover? who cares? he is a man with even a lesser past and a lesser future...3*

Thoughts

"Occasionally Arlene said she had to go out at night" She "had" to go out? She doesn't have a job, so unless she has some family obligation that he should probably know about, why does she "have" to go out? And the clothing changes and late hours are a dead giveaway.

"I didn't want to be a suspicious jerk so I never asked her anything.", So, you'll be a blind fool instead!

"We'll buy something of our own" - The LAST thing you want to do is buy a place of your own! You KNOW that at best she'll stick around only until Charlotte leaves, probably cheating with Jason all the while, then she'll get half the house!

It's your story, and if that's the way you see it ending, so be it.

But I still think my ending is more likely!

Hey I give this a 5

this presentation envelopes many relationships. having to smile because my wife says I was the winner... and her JASON is still out there. And the back seat action fits them to a tea... thanks

S 10?

I thought that S-10 trucks did not have a back seat.

S10 Blazer

@coffeemugg - the S10 Blazer was an SUV.

Dreams and Fantasies fill our lives

Interesting story about uncomplicated people, with simple lives, limited ambitions, and plenty of juvenile memories. Story is well writen. I like the author's humor "bony bitch with more elbows than a porcupine has quills..." The end was predictable for it's easier to go on with the comfortable you know that the new that you don't know, but the characters were well delineated and believable. Again, a solid good story about people and their lives.

Jason came back after 15 years. This Arlene lived in the past

Not a bright women, after leaving and no word for 15 years she hooks up with him again. He let himself go to be a fat pig yet she still chased a memory. She was a back seat easy lay. Take her back why? He got the daughter on his side and she left so the courts would award him custody . Now he takes her back and had to live with her adultress cunt. . How do you accept that. You feed her and clothes her and put a roof over her head and she takes off. Sorry no redeeming factors here.

Good to see you writing, thank you

Thank you

5

great story because you pissed off the asshole who votes a 1 on every fucking story

Not bad

Not good. Just sort of mediocre. Didn't much care for any of the characters. It wasn't badly written, there just wasn't much of a story here. None of the characters were at all interesting and I just wonder why this story needed to be told. There were no nasty surprises and no humiliation or cum slurping so I gave it a 3.

Hi there...

First, I'm wrestling with several really long and complicated stories, but I also have a wad of outlined things I'd like to get done too. My rationale, I've been writing a three part novel, my wife got us an agent, and it looks like it's for real so my literary days on Literotica could be severely curtailed.

Second, this little story, though it sounds fanciful is largely true. One of my sons had this exact series of events happen to one of his friends so that might be why it sounds real. Of course, names, occupations, and locations are all different.

Third, I'm disappointed in the low scores, but so far no one's been nasty or surly so that's a good step.

Last, I got this baby on paper and in bed in four hours!

Thanks for reading. Hope it was a pleasant diversion.

Jedd Clampett

A slice of life

I enjoyed this story, and especially enjoyed the narrative style. It's a story about imperfect people acting imperfectly. I'm a little surprised Cal took her back so easily, however. If I were him, it would have taken a lot more convincing. When you find out your love is unrequited, the smart move is to move on. Then again, we don't always make the smartest moves -- which is pretty much the theme of this story.

Thanks for contributing.

Good story as usual.

I'm on a tablet so this will be short. Not every story here is BTB. Not every one is RAAC.
This is in between. This is life. Yes Arlene was an adulterous slut but hubby came out on top as he should have. 5 *'s
Honeylicker1124

Just another fucking wimp idiot character.

Stupid cuck deserved the misery and the skanks win again (as usual in these fucked up submissions). Puke!

I never understood why so many women put that first boyfriend/guy that took their virginity up on a pedestal and idealize them for years or even decades. I fucking despise my first girlfriend to this day. Yeah, she fucked me and then she fucked me over pretty badly.

I took a wife back once after...

One thing about doing that. Be ready.
The real truth is, they do not change, it is just the way it is with some women. Men too, of course, but a female for some nutty reason, never forgets that first time.
In my case, the 2nd time was one TOO many.
Way it is.

Nice to read another 5* story from you

Always helps the day ho a little better.

The story worked well an d shows that fantasises should sometimes just stay as fantasies.

I can't believe

You are so thin skinned that you took down at least 2 Alvin York corrections. The story is still a-1.

Thank you

For sharing your unedited work with us. Four hours effort is indeed obvious. "Slice of life" it is but as a tale it is without conspicuous merit. I do know a few guys who have taken a wandering wife back again. Don't know that I could do that.

Good rating, because

"Nothing about religion.
No politics.
Nobody gets shot or beaten up.
No Afghan heroes or Karate experts.
And nobody gets taken care of by anybody named Mario."

Thank you. That disclaimer alone was worth a 4 star rating. On the negative side, well, by now the author should know the difference between Calvin and Alvin York. As to Jason, no one voluntarily leaves the military after 16 years, only 4 years short of retirement at half pay for life. Of course a 50 inch waistline, may have been a deal breaker for the reenlistment physical.

war heros

Alvin York was the war hero from the First World War, not Calvin York.

love the writing

love reading your stories but this one i have trouble relating to it. the way i see it he should have let her go for good and moved on with his life with his daughter. i'm sure she would have stayed with him as it looked like she didn't even like her real sperm donor. and thats what he was just a sperm donor. he has to remember that she was cheating on him for almost 4 months before he found out and she was willing to give up everything to be with him. the way looks she came back only cuz of her daughter not being willing to go with her. keep writing

Not Bad

Giving it 4 stars just to off set those who give it 1 star. So it has a few mistakes, some people just need to get over themselves. Lets see them put something out better!

my 2 cents for jedd

If I was Calvin, I'd have forced the issue over having a kid of my own. I would have also looked for a girl who would put out on those double dates. Good writing Jedd,4 stars from me.

good luck

on your new writing endeavors, though this one was a little hard to believe you've definitely been one of the better lit authors and the LW readers will miss you!!

Liked it, but had a few issues

I have to completely agree with Saxon Hart, at least in part. I would have been more insistent on having a kid of our own, especially given the circumstances around the first one. It wouldn't have changed this situation any, but it would have been a legitimate request. At least in my opinion. Women often go into the Stepmother role and insist on having a kid of their own. So this was fair.

As far as finding a girl to put out on those double dates, easier said than done. Especially in high school. I remember what it was like in those days trying to get a girl to have sex with you. It was feast or famine for guys that was comfortable around women and considered popular. I would think being a middle of the lane kind of kid would have made that endeavor trickier.

Issues that i had was with the reconciliation. I know that you tried to keep it short and sweet, but in this case I felt like more was needed. It felt kind of bland to me. I can see this story really playing out in real life, but i think there would be more that would have had to happen before the couple took another run at it.

For instance, she suddenly came back after she realized her mistake. She'd only been gone for a few weeks. Before she left, she said that 16 years of being a good wife was long enough to pay her "gratitude" to him. Ouch! How does he recover from that statement so quickly? Secondly, when she came back she still said that she wasn't in love with him. These two statements alone would end any ideas that i would have had at making it work. In my mind, he swept a lot of overlooked statements under the rug that most people, women as well as men, wouldn't have been able to stomach. There was no "you complete me" moment that the audience would have liked to make that reconciliation feel good. It seemed like she was saying that if she couldn't have the kind of love that she wanted, that she would settle for what she had. Who would want to be settled for?

Still, i love realistic stories. This definitely fit the bill. The protagonist was kind of lazy and a bit of a momma's boy. We all know someone like that! The wife was a woman who did what she felt like she was expected to do because she didn't think that she could have better. We pass these people all of the time in the grocery store, or know a person like them. I give it 4 stars.

Alllllllllllllllllllvin!

Alvin is not just a chipmunk name. Alvin York.

The story is boring and not erotic.

Story of a fool...

Is it for real there are dumb idiots in this world like your protagonist?

Risky at every turn

Calvin risked his life on a fantasy. Arlene didn't burn with passion for him. He knew that when she chose Jason, yet he continued double dating with them. Arlene gave him nothing, Jason used him for his vehicle, and his other dates got a show while he got blue balls. Risk lost.

He risked his career choice to a less expensive track, comm college to become a tech, night school to become a PA, then med school to be an MD. He made it half way while staying home and serving with the National Guard. Didn't make it all the way (yet), but stayed relatively debt free. Risk won.

Married Arlene knowing she carried Jason's child. Knew he was second best, and found the reality of marriage to Arlene much less than he hoped. Risk lost.....WAIT, he really dug being Charlottes Dad. Risk won with bonus points. When she chose to stay with Cal, it was the Golden Snitch, the rest of the game was just show.

Oh but one more to mention, he never moved out of his mom's house? Seriously? He raised someone else's 16 year old in his mom's house? And he never had his own kid? Nope...big loss. Doesn't trump the Golden Snitch, but it sure takes the shine off it.

Kudos to Carvohi for twists and turns in Cal's life.

Maninconn

Humor and Insight

Carvohi's characters, particularly his male protagonists, often display an engaging variety of self-deprecating humor. That quality is again on display here. It helps explain Cal's ability to endure the shock of Arlene's infidelity and to find the strength to forgive and to reconstruct his family. If there are flaws in the story they are partially the result of the author's self-imposed word limits. Arlene's initial surrender to a renewed adolescent fantasy and her subsequent rejection of Jason's inducements would have benefited from further development. I also question the portrayal of the older Jason as an overweight dissolute slob. I doubt that even a misguided Arlene would have seen him as the return of her first love. Nevertheless even a flawed Carvohi work is vastly superior to most stories posted on this site.