The Massage Club Pt. 03

rushed

Sorry but after the last two (which were great!) This just felt rushed with no planning. Sorry.

Hell yeah!

Now this is what we were waiting for from the start, not that the slow and passionate progression was bad or anything. And now that there are these saturdays to look forward I sincerely hope you'll add more chapters to this story, keeping fingers crossed for something more than just massages and fucking between those two.

Nothing but a solid 5* will do here!

I'm genuinely sorry to complain.

After a tremendous amount of build-up, all that anticipation, the "skirting the edge", etc, this felt rushed. I'm pleased that you finally had your characters step across the line, but this chapter was super short, and had almost no build-up at all. Compared to the first two chapters, this was over in a blink of an eye. You really (really) should have put as much effort into this chapter as the preceding ones.

The first 2 were great and so much potential. Too bad you couldn't keep it up...literally! This was like the 3rd installment of a movie franchise, rushed and poorly written.

Please do a re-write...

The previous two chapters were excellently written and this one was clearly not up to your standards. This story read like your heart and soul were not in it and that you had to make a publishers due date. Again I implore you to consider re-writing this chapter to not only add more depth to it but to bring it up to your normal standards.

Quite a letdown

I'm going to have to agree with the other comments. There was barely any build-up to the two finally having sex, and it just felt rushed. Not nearly as good as the first two parts.

What happened?

I agree this chapter was a big disappointment. First 2 chapter were great but this one felt so rushed like you didn't even care about it anymore.

barely has time to get wet......

need I say more.........try again? Please? the first 2 were so hot....

It's okay Spen!!

Hey, there's nothing wrong with this chapter. If readers read 1-3 in one sitting it'd feel right. it's their own faults.

She could have handed him a rubber and still technically not broken rule 3, and this ending was just fine

I agree with the other comments. The other two chapters were way too good and deserve a better ending.

I loved Parts 1 and 2.

Dont misunderstand me. Part 3 is a good addition to a GREAT Series. Alone its ok BUT IMHO tho it fell short by comparison to what I had gotten used to reading in this series

from author

Sorry some of you felt shorted on this last chapter, I do admit it was less in every way than the first two chapters. I would've personally preferred to leave it at two chapters but people were driving me crazy for another, most were demanding that the two characters finally go all the way.

Good ending

I enjoyed it, never mind the critics.

I just read the stories here for fun, and you should write for the same reason, don't worry so much about "consistency". You're not a factory, and fun is something short but sweet.

Should you wish to continue with these two, there's some obvious ways out of this narrative corner since their rule 3 exception was so specific. With the experience of what it's like to go all the way with each other, their self denial upon return to the previous rules could be all the more exquisite.

Waiting.......

I'd love to see more. What else can I say. Your word pictures are superb!

Was kinda short and rushed compared to the previous chapter.

Loved The Series

I absolutely loved the series. I am a huge fan of massage leading up to sex, and especially when there is this heat between a brother and sister. This last one feels rushed, though.

You can continue this series, especially considering the ending that you have given for this one. Please please please write more for this series. It is so hot

Goog Stuff.

I agree that they needed to fuck. Definitely. Perhaps you should add this to the end of Part 2 and delete Part 3 as an edited version of the story. Just a thought. Loved the story. Can't wait to read your others!

Rule 3

Condoms . No contact ;)