I enjoyed this about as much as I would watching a dog fight. These two are hopeless. He's right, she is a bitch. And he's a stereotypical male chauvinist who basically hates women. They deserve each other. I realize the world is full of people who are dedicated to being miserable but these two are too eager to share that misery. Not my cup of tea.
She maybe a bitch, but he's a very stupid prick. I agree with mountaincat4. That chauvinistic crap died a long time ago. This should be re-written, and the crap removed. Hopefully the next chapter (if there is one) will be better, although this does need a re-write.
If this author is a male someone needs to castrate him and superglue his testicles to his eye lids. Either way give up trying to write if this is the only thing you can do.
It's a story. For God's sake get over it. Everybody isn't the same. If you want sugar and spice and everything nice you're probably on the wrong website. He didn't beat his sister - he fucked her. And she fucked him. Maybe that's the end - maybe not. Get a life! If there's a sequel I'd like to see it.
English
Too unhappy for me.
I enjoyed this about as much as I would watching a dog fight. These two are hopeless. He's right, she is a bitch. And he's a stereotypical male chauvinist who basically hates women. They deserve each other. I realize the world is full of people who are dedicated to being miserable but these two are too eager to share that misery. Not my cup of tea.
Could be Better
She maybe a bitch, but he's a very stupid prick. I agree with mountaincat4. That chauvinistic crap died a long time ago. This should be re-written, and the crap removed. Hopefully the next chapter (if there is one) will be better, although this does need a re-write.
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Again, writing in present tense. It's stupid.
Junk
If this author is a male someone needs to castrate him and superglue his testicles to his eye lids. Either way give up trying to write if this is the only thing you can do.
bro & sis
I found this amusing in a way cause I know a brother and sister like that. That has a love-hate relationship like that.
I liked it.
It's a story. For God's sake get over it. Everybody isn't the same. If you want sugar and spice and everything nice you're probably on the wrong website. He didn't beat his sister - he fucked her. And she fucked him. Maybe that's the end - maybe not. Get a life! If there's a sequel I'd like to see it.
I liked it!
Too funny. Bro and sis are 2 beers short of a 6 pack and she says he's a deep thinker!!! LOL!
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