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English
Moh's Scale of Hardness
convection current
of molten magma
moves these plates
your way
damn, geology will never be the same
Miss Cordelia, mistress of the word
I think you have inspired me
italics
One tiny suggestion: try ahhh in italics. I think it may work better.
Do rocks bouy or just bear?
"Buoy my being" is a fine phrase and image.
The first three stanzas use alliteration nicely.
I like the first half of the poem quite a bit.
The second half gives me problems in following your thought
and connecting it strongly with the opening.
And it is a harsher read since you have avoided similar sounds.
I would guess that this was a purposeful choice.
I enjoyed this...
Very well done, and heartfelt. Thank you.
I remain, Thesandman
Ooops
That was supposed to be 100% Sorry about that. I really DID like it!
Thesandman
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