All Comments on 'Ravaged by the Roadside'

The run on sentences, missing words, and grammar need fixing. A good editor goes a long way towards make something enjoyable, rather than just barely readable. As it is now, it's a good start, keep trying, and good luck.

Thanks for the feed back!

It strange how only now after a few weeks of letting it sit idle that only now I am seeing the errors you made general reference too. Guess I burned myself out and got lazy when scanning for issues!

Ill post an edited version probably tomorrow and hopefully most of the errors will be squashed this time around.

Put this in past tense. It's not a bad start but the present tense renders it unreadable.

I'll give it a shot, might take some more time converting it.

Alright, Tense is swapped out, could be a little sloppy though. I don't have any outside help other than Grammerly... a program.

Fixed a bunch of those run on sentences and squashed a lot of that repetition I accidentally left in while adding stuff.

Hopefully you all enjoy it more with the changes I made!

The changes are not up yet... oops!

It needs a little work. The sex part is better than anything I have written. The way it is worded was hard to read at times, I noticed some spelling mistakes, and I wonder why she didn't shoot flames out her ass when she cam.

The heavily edited version is STILL pending...

Yeah there are some grammatical errors, but the story is still good!!! Would you consider making another chapter??

The story is great I would love to read more chapters if you feel you could continue it

Welp, they finally published the final version, enjoy!

The first version ended with the police and her family looking for her. I’m not a big fan on this add-on. It feels rushed and not fleshed out. Description of the place, the origins, her body changes, her relationship and feelings about the first wolf should have been a second chapter. It feels different now!

The puppies. It was just weird and uncomfortable to read. never sexualize birth or breast feeding, lol. And it would have been much better if she'd have either just escaped or he'd have taken her for his own. The weird barely described orgy just felt rushed and lazy. . It started out awesome but the ending really disappointed

How strange of you to choose to bring this up the moment when I am almost about to release a rework of this story. Cutting out the end bits since it is supposed to be about getting ravaged by the roadside.

Is this a rewrite can you post up the original too

I want to read the original version again! Can you okease oost the OG? Love your work!

Love a good canine knotting - hurts so good !

My first sexual experiences were with one of our farm mutts - he use to mount me so hard and fast! The feeling of his hot knot expanding my ass to its limits while he squirted my colon full of his slippery load use to make me shoot my load on the ground between my legs every time!