It's obvious English is not your first language, why did you write it it? This is ...fucking terrible, your command of English is far below what you obviously believe it to be, please don't write any more, this was agonizing to read through. No stars
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Anonymous07/14/16
1
Gross! Me and my colleague? This may sell back in a rural village in India, but nowhere else. Don't write here anymore.
by
Anonymous07/14/16
Awful, get an editor!!!
This could have been hot, but was so lost because of the writing and ugh, lack of editing.
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Anonymous07/28/16
Awful
No grammar, no editing, some parts it was hard to read. English isnt your first language obviously but there are editing sites online. Please don't write anymore.
English
this is so hotttt
Wtf
Learn better grammar please!
Again, WTF?
It's obvious English is not your first language, why did you write it it? This is ...fucking terrible, your command of English is far below what you obviously believe it to be, please don't write any more, this was agonizing to read through. No stars
1
Gross! Me and my colleague? This may sell back in a rural village in India, but nowhere else. Don't write here anymore.
Awful, get an editor!!!
This could have been hot, but was so lost because of the writing and ugh, lack of editing.
Awful
No grammar, no editing, some parts it was hard to read. English isnt your first language obviously but there are editing sites online. Please don't write anymore.
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