The P.A. Ch. 02

pretty good

I really liked this story, can't wait for part 3

I commented on the last chapter, said there was no character development. You've not learned from any of the positive comments others left. This chapter was horribly constructed. Too many grammatical errors. The whole story was rushed and really had no hook that grabbed a readers interest. It was okay if you want a rushed 5 minute porn scene but as an erotic story this was a gigantic fail. It was an empty fuck. This reeked of being written by a dude. No depth or understanding of what being a woman is all about. Gave you 4 stars on the first chapter to encourage you but this one was an epic fail. 2 stars is generous but your grammar and style earned only 1.

Good, But...

..the use of 'your' instead of 'you're' became somewhat annoying.