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Ben & Nat: Love at Home Alone Pt. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous07/16/16

I like this one

Short & sweet, just what I like to read first thing in the morning. For once I actually invested some time in a step siblings story and I was pleasantly surprised, it was actually thoughtful, mannered, sex was secondary after true feelings and actual dialog, sure there was a few mistakes here and there but didn't effect the storytelling one bit. Keep it up and deliver the rest of the chapters soon!

5*

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by csosh07/16/16

Waiting for the next chapter!

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by clearedtofuck07/16/16

Nice

Very nice build up and character introduction

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What surprised me

Was that it was well written. There is very little you can do with this genre, to make it stand out. One of the things you can do is write it well, and that is what this author did. Congratulations

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by Anonymous07/16/16

hot hot hot

Please don't stop now ! Lol

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by horny2doit07/16/16

Its a nice start to what might be a very hot story and series of events. They may both want it but aren't quite there yet ?? I think another chapter will be hot n' hard action ..... deep down they both want it. Some very good descrptive details are in order as you progress and hopefully; it will be soon. Its arousing at this stage. Thank you.

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by Anonymous07/16/16

In love

Don't stop. This looks like it is going to be sweet, romantic and with good sex. Just the way i like it, and it is believable

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by Anonymous07/16/16

Nice hot story!

Great beginning! They don't seem rushed, but their physical attraction/love is beginning to grow. When his shirt comes off, and she sees that muscular chest, please let him have some sexy hair for his pecs, with a bit of hair growing between them. That is so sexy on a young man!

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by QuestioningLit07/17/16

Excellent

Great story and writing. Love the bit of humor, also. Can't wait for more.

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by maboss0307/17/16

characters nicely developed

Cannot wait for part 2 and to learn about their growing relationship.

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by maboss0307/17/16

characters nicely developed

Well done, I too like that nothing was rushed, the pace was good. Looking forward to Part 2.

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by mharrison07/18/16

Good start

Really enjoyed this - looking forward to reading more.

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