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Tease?
Not even a BJ and that was it jeez.
One Star and that was too much!
English must not be your native language because you made so many errors, I stopped reading after only a few lines.
No reader likes to have to "translate" what the "author" is trying to convey as they read a story.
Go back to school and/or get yourself a proofreader! Don't submit another thing until you do>
What a wanker
The only one who could find anything to jerk off over in this load of rot is the prick who wrote it.
'Frig'?
It's "fridge"!
"placed it on my deck at an angle"
I think you intended to say "placed it on my desk at an angle". That's just one example of why you need an editor. Spellcheck won't help you find and fix all the errors in this story. Stuff like the example makes readers have to stop and figure out what the author was intending to say. There was just too many errors to be an enjoyable read.
What a waste
Still waiting for something erotic to develop??? After I mentally untangle all the grammar errors.
Is anything actually going to happen?
Good start
Quite a few moms like to tease son and make him aroused. They get a thrill knowing son jo for her.
I like it
Please continue, don't be discouraged by the score.
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