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Good Idea
I liked the idea, it was just rushed and poorly written.
yeah i have to agree
its a great concept and by all mean please don't stop but put a little back story to it and develop the characters and don't rush anything take your time with it.
Stupid ass story
This sucks. Hopefully you can do better than that.
No build up, not even an explanation????
Incest needs a lot of build up.
How and why did he end up marrying his granny?
you guys want a prequel?
you're gonna get a prequel
A start
Fast start faster ending. The idea has a lot of potential if the characters were better defined and more fully developed. The same goes for the plot. The reader is also left wondering what happened. Another chapter is needed.
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