Family Holliday

Good Start

OK Now let's go

Nice

More please !

More!

I agree, more of this storyline. Please. Your writing is quite good.

Great!

This was very good. Looking forward to see what'll happen next.

Heading in the right direction

Its great to see the sister take hold of the situation, lets hope the next chapter has her doing the same and enjoying a week of her brothers meat.
If only all sisters were like this!

Great start

I am as hard as Jack

Rushed

A very good story but I feel it was rushed, I'd have preferred a slow build up, maybe with both just wearing underwear for the first day and nothing erotic happening until the second day. I really enjoyed the story though, it got me hard.

Little to fast

I agree that it felt rushed. A nice slow build up would have been really nice, but I still enjoyed the story and am looking forward to the next chapter.

Yes, slow start but excellent writing and a great ending ... I think Jack and Megan have a chance to screw each other all week and should after their mutual face to face masturbation !! I think she wants it and he will follow. Cannot wait until the next chapter, thank you.

Eight inches?

Isn't there a male in these stories that's not hung like a horse? Really not a story criticism, but when every story has a male with an eight plus inch cock, it is not believable.

TALK?

You need to do far more than just TALK! You need to get busy and write another chapter!

Great Story

Waiting for next chapter. Thanks

Good so far, but needs character development.

So far the story is looking good. I kinda want to know more about the characters besides their physical characteristics and the fact that they are brother and sister. Looking forward to the next part!

good

but hated the ending

Camping gear

Must be very big rucksacks to fit a tent or tents, presumably sleeping bags, chairs, food for two for a week, cooking gears well as clothes etc. Two of them carried all this through forest without any trail to follow and just happened to arrive at a clearing with a convenient swimming place and water supply and mobile phone reception! Wow!

Great!

Have her insert a twig up his ass and masturbate him using freshly squeezed skunk oil.

good start

you got it right there...take us to the romance too

More

Can't wait to read more

very good

This story was very good I can't wait to read what happens between them

More!!

When does the next part come out? I can't wait to read it!!

Please Continue!

Really hot beginning! Can't wait for more!

Go on, please! That was a very good beginning to a series.

Some of our Literotica writers have been known to disappear, for reasons unknown, and never complete their stories. Please don't be one of them! Make a little time to continue your tale, and let us know what becomes of Jack and Megan. I'm hoping for
a long-term incestuous romance.

I'm thinking that they used to be very close when they were younger, but found that puberty forced them to be more other siblings. Perhaps each had always wished that the two of them could be close again, and this camping trip gave them a chance to be each other's favorite person again.