No plot, no build-up of tension between son and mom, and almost no dialogue - and what there IS, of that, is poorly written with an inane penchant for being a Mommy-baby.
At least the author - on his Lit Bio page - was honest with us and admits he'll never be a writer.
i liked it it sounded more real then the lone woke up to it.first time i fucked my mom was in a pool it went alot like that but we went from the pool to the bed room
I don't understand why everyone thinks stories need to be "perfect"..?
Guess what... There's no such thing as perfection. This was a fun Son fucking Mom in the damn pool romp and I enjoyed the hell out of it.
Bonemeal... Work on another and we'll see if it isn't an improvement over this one.
But I think your Mom is one HOT fuck...!
They don't have to be perfect and we all have to start somewhere. Good job I enjoyed it and look forward to the next installment. Thanks.
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Anonymous08/04/16
yes, I agree with the positive commenters--this is a fine story
Personally, I've got to admire an author who lists his fetish as "Oedipus Complex" and who gives as the subtitle of his story, "into mom's vagina." For lots and lots of boys, their own mother's vagina is uniquely desirable and hard on-making. They dream about it, they whack off thinking about it, they love giving it affectionate names. "My mother's mommy-hole." "My mother's pretty pussy." "Mom's sweet slit." "My mommy's tasty twat." "The twat I came out of." "The ultimate cunt of all the world's cunts." "The cunt I'm dying to get back into." "The glorious hairy hole between mom's thighs that's there for her baby boy." "Her son's semen-catcher." are only a few. For plenty of boys nothing can ever compare with their own mom's vagina.
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Ho, Hum...
No plot, no build-up of tension between son and mom, and almost no dialogue - and what there IS, of that, is poorly written with an inane penchant for being a Mommy-baby.
At least the author - on his Lit Bio page - was honest with us and admits he'll never be a writer.
It was okay
*** and that is generous.
o liked it
i liked it it sounded more real then the lone woke up to it.first time i fucked my mom was in a pool it went alot like that but we went from the pool to the bed room
soory guys i scrached my eye sorry for the miss spell. cant see to good lol
Typical
Typical.
Move along. Nothing to see here
No character development. Like eating poorly made frosting without the cake. Just a stroke story and not all that interesting.
Sorry but... I LOVED it..😁
I don't understand why everyone thinks stories need to be "perfect"..?
Guess what... There's no such thing as perfection. This was a fun Son fucking Mom in the damn pool romp and I enjoyed the hell out of it.
Bonemeal... Work on another and we'll see if it isn't an improvement over this one.
But I think your Mom is one HOT fuck...!
I agree with Pistolpete,
They don't have to be perfect and we all have to start somewhere. Good job I enjoyed it and look forward to the next installment. Thanks.
yes, I agree with the positive commenters--this is a fine story
Personally, I've got to admire an author who lists his fetish as "Oedipus Complex" and who gives as the subtitle of his story, "into mom's vagina." For lots and lots of boys, their own mother's vagina is uniquely desirable and hard on-making. They dream about it, they whack off thinking about it, they love giving it affectionate names. "My mother's mommy-hole." "My mother's pretty pussy." "Mom's sweet slit." "My mommy's tasty twat." "The twat I came out of." "The ultimate cunt of all the world's cunts." "The cunt I'm dying to get back into." "The glorious hairy hole between mom's thighs that's there for her baby boy." "Her son's semen-catcher." are only a few. For plenty of boys nothing can ever compare with their own mom's vagina.
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