by TheStarryEyedDreamer
I think its idea is good and the rhymes are ok. It has very off timing which makes it disjointed to read, I think if you took more time with it and really tried to get it right, it could have been a lot better, I encourage you to continue writing in the future and improve your technique. Despite the lack of technique however, I did find it amusing and fun to read.
Isn't that what Literotica stands for ? Well I'm ignoring the Literary aspect and giving this poem a 5 for Eroticism.
I like eat pussy and ass and I like lick pussy and ass +919610113359