Mistress Ashley Ch. 01

Boring

No romance, a pathetic loser male and a man hating cunt. I am writing this to scare away potential readers.

Very good start.

I think this was a good start to a very interesting story. Just make sure that you keep it realistic. He will have to eat something in order to stay alive, so don't make it seem he can starve himself just to please her. Other than that, you are doing great.

he should

have kicked her by the word "have your insurance paycheck sent to me"
this shows she is just an unfair being that abuses

Great start!

A very promising beginning to the story! I am very interested in seeing where this leads! Please keep writing!

I like it, it borders a little on the abusive side. But that's why I like reading these stories. So I can fantisize about things that can't really happen in real life. This is done really well without being overly abusive. However please remember to keep it realistic and do not let the main charecter starve.