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forever yours
You don't make the prospect sound particularly pleasing.
The theme's scheme seems sad,
not happy.
forever yours
You don't make the prospect sound particularly pleasing.
The theme's scheme seems sad,
not happy.
Great images
as always
And perhaps you were talking about belonging to nature itself?
or vice versa
A lovely read
Thank you
It doesn't matter
if it's happy or sad in tone--it's well written! My only nitpick (and it truly is a nitpick) is the use of "weaved." I know you were going for parallel construction of the verbs that begin each strophe, but I think "Woven," while not strictly parallel with the other two verbs, makes for a smoother read. Either way, it's good stuff. :)
Cool, Smooth....
Captured and held in beauty.
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I've got to go with Ange on "woven" instead of "weaved". It sounds better. The tone of the poem, however, seems rather foreboding, despite the hint of promise in the title.
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