All Comments on 'Motes, re-visited'

a wonderful pen...you have the gift from a great muse...thanks/bluerain

this poem is complete, nothing more, nothing less.

her lips in a rictus

of unblinded lust

as He wanted her to be

. . . in God's eye.

Powerful imagery as expected.

Unusual words as usual.

edits?

"minds" - should be possessive.

" beget" - should it be past tense?

"swimming

like krill

in the warm blanket of Our lives

scuddles and ensconced in the warmth"

wow... It was very good until I read these lines and I thought, yes, even better. Good, good stuff.

jim : )

I can't choose a favorite section in this one. The entire poem is too good.