mirror of surrender

bones

Often poets are told to condense or tighten their work,
to chop out as much verbiage as possible.
This work is right on the edge of become inscrutable.
Particularly since the poet abstains from punctuation.
After you cut through the quick to the bone,
be careful you don't chip it.
The more you cut beyond a certain point, the fewer readers will appreciate the work.

I like:

"understood is
the creative
original
illuminating
its right
to assimulate
the dance"

Even with the error.