I really liked it. You give us two realistic characters in an only slightly off-kilter situation. Kayley is interesting: dumpy and clumsy but at the same time sexy and confident. On the other hand, Sam, the soccer star, is the one who can't quite make heads or tails of what is going on. The way you just jumped into the story and felt no need to provide any backstory contributed to the charm. Good work. Thanks.
I agree, you gave us enough information about the characters to get us engaged, but did so quickly, and kept my rapt attention right. Very nicely done. Thank you.
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Intriguing little story
I really liked it. You give us two realistic characters in an only slightly off-kilter situation. Kayley is interesting: dumpy and clumsy but at the same time sexy and confident. On the other hand, Sam, the soccer star, is the one who can't quite make heads or tails of what is going on. The way you just jumped into the story and felt no need to provide any backstory contributed to the charm. Good work. Thanks.
I agree
Anonymous said it exactly.
Very nice...
I agree, you gave us enough information about the characters to get us engaged, but did so quickly, and kept my rapt attention right. Very nicely done. Thank you.
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