Good start. But for accuracy's sake, Muslim women shave. The Koran requires it at least every thirty days. Something about being unclean. But yeah, bald snatches.
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Anonymous08/17/16
Porn or not at least have knowledge of that which you include.
Your lack of knowledge about things you choose to include make it difficult for this to even qualify as porn. You need someone to edit your stories. You managed to throw your ignorant view of disabled people, Muslim people, Somalians, and several other stereotypes which added nothing to your "porn." I am sorry your life has included people who fit your stereotypical beliefs, but it is far from normal. I help care for people on disability and not one drinks, has addiction problems, or turns their no longer in existence "food stamps" into cash. They are people with a physical or mental disability which makes working not possible for them. They would love being able to work full time, and several of them had great paying jobs before becoming ill.
Your anger at your poor station in life should be turned inward instead of being directed at others. If you do not like working hard for little pay then do something to better it. Get an education instead of wasting time with poorly written "porn." You can take courses online, and work around your job. Feeling better about yourself and your station might make you less angry at others. Having a disclaimer is pointless if you know you include truly offensive things about others. Sadly you fail to even get those things correct. The other person to comment also pointed it out. At the very least research the people you chose to write about.
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Anonymous09/01/16
Very odd start with tags that don't connect
I'd forget about writing about things you are angry over and focus writing stories on things you do know. The only people I know who live like that are old and have earned the right to grow old and spend their government money on booze. I my self am disabled, I'd have to pay a premium just to work to insurance for my medical history. You just made a world in which I'm now morally ungrateful and lazy, yet I have to live in a small house and barely have $20 after food/housing is paid. I'f you plan on sticking with doing these I'd suggest you do it in the non-erotic and make it easy to figure its you expressing your thirst for things or hatred. Not bashing you as you have only 2 stories and haven't read the other, so do take this as something to learn from and help you in writing more. (if nothing else read into a lil google on the subject you choose to write on in your story)
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Good start. But for accuracy's sake, Muslim women shave. The Koran requires it at least every thirty days. Something about being unclean. But yeah, bald snatches.
Porn or not at least have knowledge of that which you include.
Your lack of knowledge about things you choose to include make it difficult for this to even qualify as porn. You need someone to edit your stories. You managed to throw your ignorant view of disabled people, Muslim people, Somalians, and several other stereotypes which added nothing to your "porn." I am sorry your life has included people who fit your stereotypical beliefs, but it is far from normal. I help care for people on disability and not one drinks, has addiction problems, or turns their no longer in existence "food stamps" into cash. They are people with a physical or mental disability which makes working not possible for them. They would love being able to work full time, and several of them had great paying jobs before becoming ill.
Your anger at your poor station in life should be turned inward instead of being directed at others. If you do not like working hard for little pay then do something to better it. Get an education instead of wasting time with poorly written "porn." You can take courses online, and work around your job. Feeling better about yourself and your station might make you less angry at others. Having a disclaimer is pointless if you know you include truly offensive things about others. Sadly you fail to even get those things correct. The other person to comment also pointed it out. At the very least research the people you chose to write about.
Very odd start with tags that don't connect
I'd forget about writing about things you are angry over and focus writing stories on things you do know. The only people I know who live like that are old and have earned the right to grow old and spend their government money on booze. I my self am disabled, I'd have to pay a premium just to work to insurance for my medical history. You just made a world in which I'm now morally ungrateful and lazy, yet I have to live in a small house and barely have $20 after food/housing is paid. I'f you plan on sticking with doing these I'd suggest you do it in the non-erotic and make it easy to figure its you expressing your thirst for things or hatred. Not bashing you as you have only 2 stories and haven't read the other, so do take this as something to learn from and help you in writing more. (if nothing else read into a lil google on the subject you choose to write on in your story)
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