Very hot premise and a great start to the story. Definitely need part two of the story! Hubby should get a creampie at the end!
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Anonymous08/19/16
Nice work, but...
Could have used a little more detail about Annie, I might have tweaked it a little, but good story, solid writing. However, I hate when you guys take what's essentially one story and chop it up into "chapters." Are you just to impatient to get it out there that you can't finish writing it first? I liked it, but I doubt I'll remember to come back to find part 2. Docking you a star for posting an unfinished story.
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Good start!
Very hot premise and a great start to the story. Definitely need part two of the story! Hubby should get a creampie at the end!
Nice work, but...
Could have used a little more detail about Annie, I might have tweaked it a little, but good story, solid writing. However, I hate when you guys take what's essentially one story and chop it up into "chapters." Are you just to impatient to get it out there that you can't finish writing it first? I liked it, but I doubt I'll remember to come back to find part 2. Docking you a star for posting an unfinished story.
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