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A very common fantasy...
A very common fantasy: Sex in a shop's changing room...Just a question: Were they married? 2*
You change tenses.
Now and then she does something, and then a bit farther along she did something. Work on keeping one tense, and usually past is best.
impo
Married??Who cares,Get a life..
Fun Story!
Without noting the two being married, Erotic Coupling seems to be a more appropriate category for this. But that doesn't detract in the least from making it an entertaining flash read. Kudos!
re: anonymous-impo
Who cares? Apparently you don't. Hey dickhead, read the description of the categories. There is a reason for them, in case you're to dumb to know that.
Nothing worthwhile today in LW
Might as well move on, however, shouldn't complain LW did have a few good ones this week. Surprise, surprise, shit does happen now and then.
Good, fun read
I'm going to assume that they were married, since it is in LW.
I found this to be very erotic and the chance of getting caught raises the hot factor for me.
I found the flow of the story to be nice, and hit all the right notes for a flash.
Looking forward to more from you. Thank you for writing.
To those who say wrong category and read the description of LW: Please take note of the "& more" at the end of the description. Those two words allow for a very broad range of stories, not just what each of us define as LW.
So, kick back with your favorite beverage, pick a story, and enjoy. In the end reading Lit is supposed to be fun.
To the commentator that remembered the "& more"...
To the commentator that remembered the "& more"...So in "& more" anything enters, so why the need to all the categories in Literotica? Even gay men can be married nowadays, and so enter in "& more"! If a sadistic boyfriend beats his girlfriend, may enter in "& more", and so on...So he must sugest to Literotica to have no categories and put all stories in the same bag...
Men Like Shopping Too!
Fun, erotic story. I remember 20 years ago, before security camaras, my wife and I did this scene a couple of time. Nowdays, we would never dare.
This is a great way to motivate men to go shopping with their women. Thanks for a great story!
@impo_61
In regards to the "& more" bit:
I seem to recall that SS06 did write a story that started as two lesbians that were married, so I wouldn't be too surprised if there was at least one story in LW that featured a GM marriage. (though I have neither seen nor looked for that particular type story)
As to the sadistic husband, RG just posted a story before his last, 4 chapter story, that more than fits the bill for sadism in LW. If I recall correctly, I believe that the protagonist's(?) name was something like Bloody Rick.
There are also SF/F, non-erotic, erotic horror, romantic, and erotic couplings scattered throughout LW. To be honest, if someone really looked, they probably WOULD find every category in Literotica represented, with the main requirement seeming to be a couple at the heart of the story.
In regards to eliminating all categories:
If I was going to argue a side, I would actually argue the other way and suggest eliminating LW, since every story in LW can easily fit in one, or more of the other categories.
The only problem with me arguing for the elimination of LW is that LW is my favorite category, by far.
This has been interesting. Thank you, impo_61, and have a great weekend.
@ Selq&Impo
I agree , their isn't anything that seems to be off limits in this category ( except for lack of sex) . Laurel came out in the discussion boards and basically said as much recently . It's a shame really , but that's just how the cookie crumbles I guess.
TX Tall Tales wrote an Essay & Review once called " Loving your readers : categories " , that I think spells out the category system pretty well.
All new authors should be required to read it before posting.
Selq, I know that you sometimes are in the forums , and I know that you have seen where certain authors actually boast that they love to post stories in LW simply to piss off readers. I certainly think that a lot of the one time posters are simply some authors attempt to " poke the ferrets" , as I have heard it called.
It's a shame that authors think so highly of the readership. But , there are Assholes' there just as they're Assholes' in the readership too.
Sorry to post this on your story's comments Cumforyou333, but I saw Selq's comment on the portal , and wanted to answer him.
Reply to the Category
Hey guys I'm glad some of you liked the story! :) But in regards to the wrong category I do apologize, I'm still pretty new. I do plan on writing more in the future so I'll be sure to pay more attention! Thank you guys for reading!
@Cumforyou333
You have nothing to apologize for. Laurel makes the final decision on where a story ends up, and felt that your story was just fine in LW. And Laurel has been known to change categories, so it's all good.
I owe you an apology, though. I should not have posted my comments in your story. They were more suited for the forums. Please accept my apology.
Damn good flash story, BTW :)
Sweetie IS adventurous!
LW is about adventurous women, (an the effect that has on the marital relationship!). Seems to meet those criteria!
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