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another stretch, in another direction,
an homage to a master done well.
Holes? Big enough to write a story in. Unfinished? I hope so.
Loved it!
As a fantasy writing Texan.. Great story. Plot holes only matter if suspension of disbelief fails. You didn't fail. Please continue this. The characters are good and vivid.
Fun
This was a fun story, I do wish there was a bit more of a buildup to the climax, a switch of perspective from Jem to Val or something to add a bit more tension, but this was a fun short story
barbarians and damsels. swords and magic.
Is what I grew up on.
I would hear more tales about these four.
Bring them back soon.
Thoughts
"she would be accept" - "she would accept"
This was a lot of fun!
It has real potential for novelizing into a "Game of Thrones" type epic.
God I hope you continue!!!
Freaking awesome!!
Loved it. Perfect escape fantasy.
Tendrils? The critter was a plant?
Tentacles...
Easter eggs if you read the entire collection?
who knows?
Green-something
Great stuff!
I remember buying Canan & Kull comics and loving them. This reminded me of those stories. Keep up the good work!
Thanks for the feedback
The feedback tells me what is working and what isn't, so it is really important. I m sure these characters will be back, they're hell of a lot of fun to write. I plan to read Howard's Red Nails again before the next installment just to pump up the volume.
Green - chose tendrils on purpose. I thought of tentacles, but discounted them because, well.... tentacles... naked harem girl.... we've all seen enough Hentai to know where THAT goes. So it's a giant, city destroying, Lovecraftian extra dimensional man eating plant. I can live with that.
Hey!
Conan, is that you? No, well, you'll do! We need some more of this story. Thanks!
Moar
Took me back to my early teen years when I found a box of old weird tales that belonged to my grandfather.
Fun read.
So far, no matter what direction you go the story is always good.
Jem and Val definitely seem to have more stories to tell, but you need to tell us more about Asha too. She just seems way too cool to leave in the background.
Again 5 stars and looking forward to your next story.
Don't forget Daddy Dearest
...who traded her for probably worthless trading rights now, in the Pasha s absence. And brothers and a mother...
Okay, as Howard pastiches go...
...this one wasn't bad. There wasn't enough dripping ichor, though that's really a stylistic thing, and I don't think you EVER used the word "squamous."
Yeah, I liked it. Nice entertaining read.
Excellent!
I grew up on Robert E. Howard, L. Sprague deCamp, and Fritz Lieber. This was a wonderful tribute, and I look forward to more. I agree with another commentor that these characters have more of their story to tell.
More please...
Didn't expect to like it much, not my kind of genre, but I trust your writing ability and was pleasantly surprised. Growing up poor, I never knew anyone that read pulp mags (so I couldn't borrow them) so I'm more familiar with O.Henry, Aesop Fables, Tolkien, that kind of stuff. This was good though, I enjoyed it.
Bring us more. I'd like to see her father and brothers pay for betraying her, and maybe find out more about her mother, sisters? And of course, continue the story line about Val and Jem, we need to see what happens in further exploits.
Good story as usual, 5 stars as usual.
Yes, More Please
Yeah, there were gaping plot holes. Shit, that never happens on Lit! We expect tightly written plots with ... ah, shut the fuck up. Great stuff. Write more. It's always a good day when there's a fresh Todd story to read.
turn could be into is, and then?
She thinks it might be her father's house?
Maybe it is and he's hiding in the cellar?
The Pasha fled by sea?
Aren't the Westernor a sea power?
very good!
More please!
Love that the women fought as they could
Although having recently re-read the Tarzan books, Jane became quite skilled at jungle lore and survival, and was always a strong personality.
Yes, I'll add my voice to those asking more of these characters; and being that Val is a little sweeter/more heroic/more honorable than the "barbarian army" norm, it would be nice to get some backstory.
Good tale
This has the potential for a series. Please do more with these four characters. By the way, I have read all of your stories with Pogo, Emma, Grease, and the others. Great stories. Keep writing.
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