Try making up names is stead of insert name bs. Also when talking to self italicize so it's noticeable their not speaking aloud.
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Anonymous08/26/16
To Anonymous "Quality"
When correcting others, make sure you don't make errors of your own!!
I agree with the bit about the (insert name here) crap but - "... so it's noticeable their not speaking aloud. "
No, no, no!!
NOT 'their'!!!! 'Their' is 'possessive! It belongs to 'them'!
It should be 'they're'!
As in "they are"!!!
...on the advice. That "insert name" is just plain juvenile!
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Anonymous08/27/16
I think the plot of your story is a great one, as many SIL and BIL fantasize and would probably do something under the right conditions. Good start, more physical details are good and forget the " insert name here " part and your story will get even better. Eventually, screwing each other hard and again will do a lot for both of them and hopefully would continue ??? Thanks and cannot wait for the next chapter.
Thanks for commenting on my story and I'm glad you like it. I'll take the advice on board about the [insert name here] thing and I'll use italics when the comments are in the head.
Thanks again!
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Anonymous08/28/16
LOVE sister in law stories. Keep "em coming
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Anonymous03/01/17
SILs
Agree that I have fantasised about my sil - a long time ago now but did have a heavy petting session which somehow did not go further. thanks for great story.
quality
Try making up names is stead of insert name bs. Also when talking to self italicize so it's noticeable their not speaking aloud.
To Anonymous "Quality"
When correcting others, make sure you don't make errors of your own!!
I agree with the bit about the (insert name here) crap but - "... so it's noticeable their not speaking aloud. "
No, no, no!!
NOT 'their'!!!! 'Their' is 'possessive! It belongs to 'them'!
It should be 'they're'!
As in "they are"!!!
Ditto....
...on the advice. That "insert name" is just plain juvenile!
I think the plot of your story is a great one, as many SIL and BIL fantasize and would probably do something under the right conditions. Good start, more physical details are good and forget the " insert name here " part and your story will get even better. Eventually, screwing each other hard and again will do a lot for both of them and hopefully would continue ??? Thanks and cannot wait for the next chapter.
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Continue the story. Thanks
Thanks
Hi Everyone,
Thanks for commenting on my story and I'm glad you like it. I'll take the advice on board about the [insert name here] thing and I'll use italics when the comments are in the head.
Thanks again!
LOVE sister in law stories. Keep "em coming
SILs
Agree that I have fantasised about my sil - a long time ago now but did have a heavy petting session which somehow did not go further. thanks for great story.
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