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From a Tomb in New Orleans Pt. 01

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by Anonymous11/08/16

Sexy

Mmmm very nice

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by Anonymous11/11/16

A few minor notes

There are a few errors here and there regarding grammar and formatting, but I do understand that sometimes those can't be helped.
However, I would like to note that you jump back and forth between present tense and past tense several times in this story. It's a pretty jarring transition if the reader isn't prepared for it. My recommendation is to pick one, present (is/are/am) or past (was/were), and run with it from there.
Beyond that, solid work, and I'm looking forward to what's coming next.

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