Where is the storyline? This is just a string of descriptions, maybe. I have no idea of the author's intentions.
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Anonymous09/09/16
Confused
I can't even score this. Its good if all you want to do is skim and "get yourself off" but no plot, no character development, or protagonist and antagonist. Always look for grammar issues too.
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Anonymous09/16/16
Not a story more a catalogue of desires
Boring, needs some shape and direction, maybe some feeling as I said more of an embellished list.
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WITH YOUR USER NAME I WANTED TO TAKE A LOOK
It is not very interest writing.
The writing was that of a 5th grader.
Read more books if you desire to become a writer.
What?
Where is the storyline? This is just a string of descriptions, maybe. I have no idea of the author's intentions.
Confused
I can't even score this. Its good if all you want to do is skim and "get yourself off" but no plot, no character development, or protagonist and antagonist. Always look for grammar issues too.
Not a story more a catalogue of desires
Boring, needs some shape and direction, maybe some feeling as I said more of an embellished list.
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