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Bring it on!!!
I absolutely love it when best friends fall in love, though I never encountered a pair with such age difference before. I have high hopes for this one, it's simply perfect from any angle and promises a slow but powerful burn.
Only a 5* will do here :)
I'm obsessed! Please write more!
loved it
great story, more please
Wonderful
Forever best friends is as it should be always in a relationship. Loved!
Really liked this!
You sure started the fire burning...now hope you will feed the flames with more!
Great start!
Wow! Way to leave us hanging!
This is a very good story that could be great with a little more attention to grammar. The storyline is excellent. Your pace and style really draw me in. There are a few parts that are just confusing and detract. For example, in paragraph two, I'm not sure if Charlie is a man or woman. Based on the third sentence, I think Charlie is a 39 year old woman and then the storyteller would be a 24 year old man. I'm confused and that confusion doesn't add to the story. I'm not trying to be picky. I just don't want things to distract from what has the potential to be a great story!
I liked it a lot, continue your story please!!
Thanks for the feedback, especially for the grammatical suggestions :) Chapter 2 is written, just needs to be typed out!
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