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completely unreadable
You need to divide your writing into paragraphs. These huge blocks are impossible to follow. There didn't seem to be a plot at all, so why read this, even as a non-erotic story (which is NOT why I go to Literotica). What little I read made no sense. You speak of a nudist resort, but not topless? Ummm, nudists are topless, as well as bottomless. Nude. Understand now?
skinnydipping with my cousin
"her and I stayed in touch..."
Silly, it's "She and I.
"...Another wedding to go to."
Try, "another wedding to attend."
Other posters are correct, your paragraphs are too long.
Skinny dipping with my cousin
It's funny, I'm such a grammar nazi in real life, but none of the things the others mentioned bothered me. It was a nice short story, but yeah you should work on the grammar and format that you write your stories. Overall it was a pleasant read for a first timer
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