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Getting better
I like the longer, more descriptive sex scene this time around, definitely a step up from the previous chapter. Still a bit short, but not so short as to leave me unfulfilled as a reader.
Score: *****
A bit short
Im really starting to enjoy the story, however i do with that the sections were a bit longer. Then again i have a preference for longer story segments. Keep up the good work.
Could be a really good read if the paragraphs become long enough to be chapters.
Good work
Longer segments would be nice
Very good build up
I like how you have taken a little different perspective on this with the bonding of the Genie to the Master and how it is his blood and fluids that make her his completely.
I agree a little longer segment would be awesome but I understand that good work takes time and putting out the next part in a timely manner may not work together well with keeping your story as good as it has been so far, but please keep up the great work.
More...
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE continue this, too many genie stories have fallen to the literotica genie curse as it is... they keep stopping prematurely...
It's true...
There seems to be some kind of curse on the genie stories on lit... Please tell us if you're giving up or something! The community will do anything to break this curse!
I like this story.
Nice story. Straight to the action. I love it!
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