Peeking at My Cousin

Pretty lame

There is little to grab the reader's interest here. An info dump as your first paragraph didn't exactly make me want to continue reading. There was no real character development and there was no dialogue. It was like eating dry toast.

Short Story that could have been longer

In short your story could have been much longer, great base for a much larger story.

Yawn

What a waste of time.

Yes, your story was very short, but there is much potential here. Hopefully, more details specifically about their bodies and about a hint of what is his cousins game plan !! Hopefully, she is just as playful, horny or whatever she's after. They can really go a long way and have a lot of fun here. Hard hot sex would really work and maybe they will get together at his apartment or the cabin again ?? Cannot wait for another chapter or two ! Thanks.

criticism

how sex wtf dude