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As soon as...
As soon as he saw the copy of a print from an antenatal ultrasound, he should have known that he had been set up! Soon he would have to pay child support...Better he begin to write fast to support his coming expenses! 1*
Rggs?
Ugly twist.
"he was laying on his front reading a somewhat bedraggled book and she was laying on her back"
What were they laying. Eggs? Carpets?
You lay something.
The world you want is "lying".
To Impo_64
It's fiction. Don't get het up about it. You shouldn't take stories like these too seriously.
Thanks, kaf
Thanks for pointing that out. You can blame local dialect. In these parts it's always 'laying', not 'lying'. I keep having to remind myself and then I can never remember which is correct and which dialect.
Interesting Take, Well Written
Liked the reverse angle of the bull who takes the wife (although we aren't told explicitly they are married). To the commenter who thinks there is a paternity problem in the future, well maybe, but it is far from certain. First of all, he might not be the father, even though she might think so. And there is no reason to think that the husband knows since the husband is unlikely to have written the letter that starts with "I" and ends with little x kisses. The husband also fucked her that week and she is unlikely to let him know her suspicions as she wants to carry this other man's baby to term. She has every reason to make her husband believe it is his so as to maintain her marriage and his support. It is clear the bull has never wanted permanent relationships. In a true cuck fashion, this hotwife needs her cuck, just not for the genetics of her children. Although there could be ramifications from changed minds in the future, I think this is a secret she is sharing with the bull alone. A perfect cuck story as the bull has placed his egg in another man's nest just like the eponymous cuckoo, the cuck unknowingly taking on the burdens of raising the bull's offspring. Of course, he might be a willing cuckold in more than letting other men fuck his wife, but perhaps letting them breed her as well. He might perfectly understand why she would want the child of a man who can take her pussy like a boss, rather than one that completely accepts her, cruelty and all. Maybe we need a sequel to see what really happens! All this is not to say that this bull might not want to be an acknowledged father at the cost of having to financially support the child since he would still be without the hassle of raising it. He has neatly put that burden on another man, the cuck father. As for the wife, she certainly wants him to know that he has successfully bred her, that his superior seed found purchase in her soil and his masterful taking of her makes her want to keep it, even if it is ultimately only a fantasy. In her mind, she has now "bred up" from her wimp husband. Good job. 4* (rated 5* to counter the haters)
Wow!
Bloody hell, cyferx, as we tend to say over here when we're taken aback, that's a lot of interesting thoughts.
I'm glad you liked the fact that the story was written from the bull's point of view. I wanted to explore that angle because it seems to be rarely done - most such stories are either written from the cuck's view or the wife's. Bulls have rights and feelings too, as well as cocks.
I deliberately didn't specify whether the couple were married or not because I didn't want it to cast an influence on the way people read the story. Marriage over here in the UK is becoming more optional and lots of couples don't marry until after they've had children, if then. Nor did I name the characters. That was deliberate, too, but I don't know why it was. Do you think there is any significance in it? Does it impersonalise the story? Does it make the characters harder to like and sympathise with?
Your thoughts on the reasons for the characters' actions are fascinating. However, given that few people ever really think through the consequences of their choices and actions, I wonder how much of what you say would have actually crossed the characters' minds. In essence, you've done the thinking that perhaps they should have done before the events described in the story and you've nicely summarised many of the issues that will arise as a result.
It does cry out for a sequel, doesn't it.
To @norfolklad...
To @norfolklad...I know it's fiction, you didn't understand my comment: I commented the story sarcastically, because none of the characters were minimally believable...And made a joke about the antenatal ultrasound scan...
Oh dear!
Impo_64: Sadly, it seems we both have a problem. Your sarcasm and jokes are clearly as unbelievable as you say my characters are. ;)
Nicely done story, 5*
And by the way kaf, on this side of the Atlantic "laying" is a perfectly correct word in that context.
Just thought you'd like to know that.
f you say so, @norfolklad...
f you say so, @norfolklad...So what is left is: each one with his opinion...No harm done...
I do, Impo_64, but no harm done
...and when you're banned under this user profile as you have been under Impo_58, Impo_60 and Impo_61, etc, I'll remove your comments. I think that makes you the minimally believable character.
Evolutionary Biology, Not Rational Plan
You thought what I was contending was actually going on in the story was unlikely to have been going through their minds at the time because people rarely think about what they are doing. .
You are absolutely right. People are usually unaware of their deeper motivations. So, I don't think much did cross their minds. It was more instinctual. A function of natural selection in human sexual biology. They were not reasoning through this. (Certainly, they were not reasoning since no mention was made of birth control at all and she ended up pregnant. Did none of them think of that? Or was that a plot hole?). They were responding to evolutionary biology. Women want the best partners for breeding, but often those with the best genes make for bad fathers with regard to resources, this is where the cuck comes in. Beta males often deal with infidelity by “being there” for their mates, perhaps hoping to sneak in there. Alphas are always looking for a free womb to impregnate. Since they don't have to compete for fertile women, they often don't offer any of them more than superior genes. They leave the resourcing of children to the beta males, who are trying to pick up a back-end win. So, bf as the beta cuck was playing the sperm competition game with this superior Alpha. Gf was willing to fuck him too to maintain her access to resources (he might be a geeky programmer who will soon be making a big salary to make up for his little dick). Who knows, he might have won, the baby could be his. There is competition for this mate by selfish genes, and we don't know which strategy won, the Alpha or beta strategy. The gf only "wins" if the Alpha seeds her, but the beta supports her. So, her strategy is a middle one. She has to keep the resource (beta) male, but hope that the Alpha gets lucky or is just more fertile than the beta to impregnate her. She can only allow the possibility, not determine the result. In fact all of them are at the mercy of chance.
Again, this wasn’t consciously thought about by any of them, but unconscious drives in them that have developed over millions of years. The woman when she saw the superior Alpha male, the Alpha when he saw a fertile female, and the beta once he saw his gf/wife being taken by a superior male. The beta knows on a fundamental level that he can't win directly against the Alpha as the woman will always choose the Alpha who desires her over the beta. So he accepts what has happened and then tries to reclaim her and make sure the sperm that fertilized that egg was his. It has been pointed out that the male penis has a flanged head for the purpose of scooping out a competitor's sperm, but it is never highlighted that this is a strategy for the SECOND male, that is the beta after the Alpha has taken priority with the female. It is the sneaky, back-end strategy. It is a evolutionary strategy since he can’t win in the Alpha manner, he tries to be the good husband and get a chance at inseminating his mate nevertheless (modern life tries to do this through the power of law, marriage, but evolutionary needs are more ancient and powerful). As for the Alpha bull, he was naturally attracted to the young woman because she was nubile and clearly fertile, and she was naturally attracted to him because of his confidence and power, maybe more so hormonally since she was unconsciously aware that this was her fertile time and her chance to gain the genes of a superior male rather than the less competitive genes of the current mate. All of this is, of course, more biology than plan, but she might indeed have a plan to cuck her bf/husband now that she knows she is having a baby and believes it is a cuckoo baby, or at least she wants it to be a cuckoo if she can actually cuck the bf by getting him to marry her. Will her plan succeed?
I will say that making it unclear she was married marred the story somewhat as betrayal of a boyfriend is not such a big deal and makes for less heady stuff, the same with sharing a girlfriend. The bf, and the story made it seem like a young gf/bf couple, has made no commitment and being cucked isn’t really happening to him. He hasn't committed resources to her. So she might have to entrap him in order to have a provider for her cuckoo child. Will she actively deceive him as who the father is (or maybe it is just wishful thinking on her part that the Alpha impregnated her and not her bf/husband), or is he the kind that is willing to be cucked. The long-term beta strategy being to get exclusivity at a later stage and father a child, a consolation prize for supporting the child of a superior male. So, there is lots of possibilities to explore. I look to forward to seeing what happens if you do choose to explore.
Re: Evolutionary Biology, Not Rational Plan
Interesting thoughts, though perhaps further discussion would be more appropriate on one of the Lit Forums rather than in comments here, if only for the sake of readability.
I will answer one point that is directly related to the story though.
>>>Certainly, they were not reasoning since no mention was made of birth control at all and she ended up pregnant. Did none of them think of that? Or was that a plot hole?
That's a good question. Such matters, including things such as STIs, safe sex, condoms, etc, are widely omitted in Lit stories, less as a result of plot hole than because they tend to be story killers. 'He led her gently to his bed. "Oh God", he cursed. "I forgot to buy some more condoms. Hang on there a minute - I'm just popping down to the drugstore."' Lit stories generally take place in a world in which STIs are unknown and unwanted pregnancies do not occur.
However, the lack of mention of birth control here was deliberate - none of the participants seem bothered about it. Why? It is for you, the reader, to decide the significance of that in the context of the story.
I am still contemplating a sequel and the direction it might take. My only fear is that you might expect too much of it - it would take a full length novel to begin to deal with all the issues and questions you've raised in a comprehensive way.
Birth Control
In your story, we don't know what the couple discussed or was thinking, but we do know what the narrator was thinking and the fact that a man like him who has made it to his age as a bachelor with not inconsiderable assets would not take precautions is fairly unbelievable. So, I would like to see how that is taken care of, that is how you write your way out of it, but we might not ever get that explanation. It is probably due to my utter lack of imagination, but without more it looks like a plot hole to me.
Not camping butt glamping at a country cottage.
Good turn in your hospitality, Cyferx sumed up some story plots that are not on the written page and not very briefly either. How very fun of (her) I'm thinking.
Another mark of a good story are the comments and I enjoyed reading them.
Would you say a writer writes about his fantasies then since you might not be writing about actual events that you have taken part in. *~*
Quite right then, carry on.
Interesting
I so liked the start of the story. The hidden valley perhaps in Dorset: it does not sound like Norfolk! The whole idea of a couple on a camping trip and asking to use a field (can remember doing that myself) came over as very real. So did the walking up the field to an outbuilding to take a shower. Rather liked the seaside postcard idea of the light in the tent revealing what was going on in silhouette. Perhaps there should be more backpacking sex stories!
Somewhat puzzled why the couple hung their prized possessions in a bag from the tent pole. A precaution against inundation certainly, but why at all would they expect that? I have never done that.
I am in mixed minds how it developed. I read the first part and only came back to it later and, having been looking forward to seeing how it developed, was a bit disappointed. I found the cuckoldry element a little forced. I could not find the un-named young man quite believable. Interestingly and deliberately no-one is named, perhaps to aid the surprise of the ultrasound and emphasise the risk of the casual 'one night stand.' Perhaps, though, if it was intended the baby is definitely the narrator's, the young man's infertility should have been revealed during the story.
Of course my disappointment could simply have been in the story not developing as I had perhaps hoped but writers do not always write as you wish! In any case the more obvious scenario of the girl getting fed up with the young man, him going off and leaving the girl to have fun with the narrator would have been a bit too straightforward and unimaginative!
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