Dances of Love

Please post feedback

Since this is my first story posted on Literotica, I'd very much like to hear feedback, both positive and negative, about writing style, what you liked and didn't like in the story, etc, so I can become a better writer and make future stories that much better and more enjoyable for everyone!

Re: Your request for feedback

Dear InnerBeast,

I saw your comment requesting feedback in the Feedback Portal and looked up your story. Sadly, I only read the first few paragraphs and then skimmed the rest.

Reason: I have extreme difficulty with stories written second person. And I think you'll find that many readers on this site also don't like that style of story telling.

From the small amount that I read, it seems that you write well, but I can't be more helpful than that.

Lue

Thanks, Lue, and much appreciated on the input, particularly if you think most people prefer 3rd person. I thought I'd post my first story in the 2nd person, and future stories will be either 2nd or 3rd person.

Feedback

I completely agree with Luedon. I found it hard to read, confusing to follow for me, as written in second person. This could be though because I always write first person present tense.
Also agree that what I did read is very well written.

From a female perspective...

I enjoyed the way it was written it's more intimate from a female's perspective but men might find it confusing maybe write two versions just change the point of view. As a woman I feel this was a pleasant read :) one of the most respectful and sensual writings I've read :)

This is really good. So masterfully and so real. Was caught up while reading itt. More please. 2nd or 3rd person it's actually written well.