Compared with the tripe we've seen on here of late, this one's a masterpiece of eroticism! Suffers a bit from a lack
of proofreading, though. Some punctuation out of place, so there IS room for improvement. Wirth the FIVE we gave it.
Some of the young smutsters who hang around here ought to be force-fed this story!
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Anonymous05/16/04
Great series.
A great series of scenarios. I enjoyed every chapter & hope there will me more, including a continuing four-way mother, daughter, son & Sue relationship.
by
Anonymous05/17/04
We need at least 2 more installments!!!
Another fabulous edition to the series!!! I think in chapter 9, the mom & son should finally get together, & perhaps at the end, the mom could discover what has been going on between Chris, Jill, & Sue all this time. Then chapter 10 could be like an epilogue (only if the story is to end there, otherwise carry on!!!) in that they do split off into couples (as I see forshadowed a bit here) but they still meet up once a month or so for a nice orgy! Perhaps children arrive (Chris & Jill, then Sue)! Just throwing around ideas! See ya next story... -Jim
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Anonymous11/11/04
This was not as clean
There were quite a few errors unlike the previous chapters. I hope your editor comes back! This is a great story, but it seems as though you're trying too hard for more chapters.
English
Very, very good story line
Compared with the tripe we've seen on here of late, this one's a masterpiece of eroticism! Suffers a bit from a lack
of proofreading, though. Some punctuation out of place, so there IS room for improvement. Wirth the FIVE we gave it.
Some of the young smutsters who hang around here ought to be force-fed this story!
Great series.
A great series of scenarios. I enjoyed every chapter & hope there will me more, including a continuing four-way mother, daughter, son & Sue relationship.
We need at least 2 more installments!!!
Another fabulous edition to the series!!! I think in chapter 9, the mom & son should finally get together, & perhaps at the end, the mom could discover what has been going on between Chris, Jill, & Sue all this time. Then chapter 10 could be like an epilogue (only if the story is to end there, otherwise carry on!!!) in that they do split off into couples (as I see forshadowed a bit here) but they still meet up once a month or so for a nice orgy! Perhaps children arrive (Chris & Jill, then Sue)! Just throwing around ideas! See ya next story... -Jim
This was not as clean
There were quite a few errors unlike the previous chapters. I hope your editor comes back! This is a great story, but it seems as though you're trying too hard for more chapters.
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