The Milk Maid Ch. 01

Hope you carry on with this story! I've had fantasies about being milked like this

It is NOT "trashed," but "thrashed."

Please get an editor. I've seen this type of story so many times. I only wish this one had the tenses correctly as well as the wording. So many girls get kidnapped and turned into milking cows. No very unique.

I don't usually give terrible reviews/comments, but this one has the reader stumbling trying to make sense of some of the sentences.

Please continue i love milk maids

Well done

Masterskitten26 is unduly critical in my view. For someone for whom English is a second language you have done pretty well. I have seen much worse spelling and grammar. Keep up the good work.

Meanwhile Masterskitten26 what did you intend when you wrote "No very unique"? Or is English not your first language either?

Thank you all for your comments. For those interested I will try to write the second part before the end of September.

To Masterskitten26:
Thank you for your criticism. I will consider your advice on getting an editor. I will edit this chapter, so it would be helpful if you (or anyone wanting to give feedback) could point out some of those sentences that you stumble to make sense of. It is hard for me to correct something I may not realize is wrong.

If you do not appreciate the theme, and you would like to read something more unique, perhaps this is not a story you should be reading then? This is what it is, and does not aspire to be anything else.

I thought this was great. Keep writing!