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Need an editor and proofread befor submitting
committee saw the tape of the bout again and noticed that she had rubbed his penis to turn him on thus she got "qualified." Should be DISqualified.
Spelling errors nakef ball instead of bell hid instead of his. and a couple others
Sentences are choppy and confusing,
Continuity in the story. At the beginning she is a rookie who hasn't debuted yet, then later she states I'm a survivor. A survivor unlike any other in this business".
Unrealistic events, Harry storming into a woman's locker room, Ursula covering herself with oil, her ring attire, Harry still lying in the ring after she finished celebrating.
Again, to improve your ratings and get more readers,get an editor and proofread!!
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