I liked where the story was going, but the story-telling, grammatical, and spelling errors forced me to stop reading. Please use an editor for any stories you post in the future.
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Anonymous09/07/16
Please get help
With your writing the tense jumps from past to present, the pov changed from talking about her to her talking mid sentence. I gave up reading sorry the idea may be good but the excicution was very poor
by
Anonymous02/09/17
continue?
Can you make another story where Ashley gets humiliated in school?
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Anonymous02/27/17
More like this?
A story following her humiliation at school and life going forward could be very enjoyable, not enough stories go this extreme and I'd like to read more like this
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Awesome!
You have a vivid imagination and you put it into words beautifully. Thanks for this!
Please get an editor
I liked where the story was going, but the story-telling, grammatical, and spelling errors forced me to stop reading. Please use an editor for any stories you post in the future.
Please get help
With your writing the tense jumps from past to present, the pov changed from talking about her to her talking mid sentence. I gave up reading sorry the idea may be good but the excicution was very poor
continue?
Can you make another story where Ashley gets humiliated in school?
More like this?
A story following her humiliation at school and life going forward could be very enjoyable, not enough stories go this extreme and I'd like to read more like this
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