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by Anonymous

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by YDD05/06/04

Love

You might want to edit some typos to make this poem read without eye pauses.

edits:
"feine" = ?
"earliar" = "earlier"
"Mischieviously" = "Mischievously"


suggestions:
"we both"
"us both!"
"we" and "us" imply "both". If you must differentiate try a word like "each".
"shining azure orbs" - Does anything really need to be said?

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by My Erotic Tail05/07/04

Words from the heart~

To feel it then write it, why change it? Nice reead and thank you, I understood it and felt it. Some can't!

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