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don't think you even tried to put any effort into the story...one star, even that was too much.
Bored
You sounded bored. Sorry!
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interesting plot
Welllll...it IS to the point! :+))
It's more like samples, with a summary?
If you want to develop your writing craft...I recommend the writings of
Kethandra and C C Rider.
Their use of specific details in the unfolding stories is exquisite.
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