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To Keep Me Falling Apart

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by jthserra05/08/04

I felt a chill with this one...

I kept trying to interject a "from" in your title, but wow, the illness metaphor adds an intensity to this poem that had me trembling with your final lines. Yes, with that last stanza, I saw where you were going. Your nicely crafted metaphor made me suddenly feel "it" when I read the ending. Excellent poetry...


jim : )

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by Tathagata05/08/04

Intense

I felt the weight of the world reading this.
Very well done

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by annaswirls05/09/04

last week

this one really touched me today Very powerful. I could only read it twice to save the tears

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