That First Night Ch. 07

A mixed bag

First half at the burger joint was kinda lame but the other half made for it, in the end it was the usual stuff with added bonus here and there so a good 4* will do.

Yes, a very nice story - the knife incident was the right thing to do and hopefully he gets the Frisco job !! Now the gal sucking the popsicle was great, it would be hot if the gal - Sazzy came to the hotel and asked for them and joined them for the fireworks and the night !! I'll bet his big cock could handle both and the girls might play with each other too ?? That would be so hot . . . cannot wait for another HOT chapter. Thank you.

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This story needs more chapters. Thanks

3

Specious? Lame. Short. Go back to school.

More please.

Odd...

This seemed to go all over the place, with the old couple, then the waitress, then the fast-food guy, then ... It just seemed to jump around. Also it's a very short chapter, promising the anal but now we have to wait. It seems you can do up an ending with a 2-pager where they get through the fireworks, he gets a job interview the next day for double or triple what he makes now. That then convinces Ashley to come back to him permanent and Happy Ending!