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Bam!!!
Ohgodddd How well you did this! I'm just dumbstruck... Thank you!
A compelling look into what is happening
I liked the way you went from the highly structured stanzas in his highly structured life, then slipped to a bit more chaotic stanza form for his time away and then ultimatly the final stanza that slowly fades away.
Excellent...
jim : )
Brilliant!
You put this so succinctly. I feel like I know this guy and many of us do. Thanks for the think.
Wow!
This is a real tour de force of a poem. I, too, like the way KundaL uses the different formats for the separate phases. Nicely done.
This was the most moving poem
of all the "Last Orders" works I read today.
The way you wove the poem through the different facets of the man's life just really moved me. Thank you for writing this piece.
Powerful writing
Very emotional but also structurally impeccable. There's nothing else I can add to what has already been said. Thank you.
well, damn
this just gave me absolute cold chills..excellent work, so sad, and what a wonderful strength you show in this poem, I especially like the structure, nice ;)
After doing the duty myself
YOU used the words I felt, while comrades were sent back in the casket.
I was lucky, just am livng life different now
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