But there was not enough content, you need to cram more in to make it work properly.
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Anonymous09/08/16
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As the other commentors said, more content and a slower buildup and you have a great story.
Maybe a second one and delve into the moms pasts and slow down the sex with more details.
Please give us more
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Anonymous09/08/16
Should have came in both of them
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Anonymous09/08/16
more chapters
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Anonymous09/09/16
Great story. This guy loved the evilness of wanting to fuck his mother. Then he enjoyed fucking his mother. Then she told him that she wasnt his mother This made him madder than hell. But he kept his madness secret. He said that I already knew that you wasnt my mother, That I only fucked you just to use your ass whore. She said that I knew you had the hots for me, so when you turned 18, I was planning to fuck you. So I planned my plan on you trying to see me naked. I left the bathroom door always cracked, always pretending that I never knew that you was looking at me naked. You thought that you had fooled me. I knew that all you wanted was just a fuck from me. But I fooled your ignorant ass you ugly bastard, I am really a whore who just gave you aids.
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Anonymous09/09/16
Great story.His real mother just told him that he was conceived in that orgy, in the story that she just had neglected to mention... That made him mad. He kept his madness hidden So he planned on using them for just a fuck. His real mother told him that she was really using him. That she knew who is real dad was in the orgy, because he, just like his dad, was the only ugly one in the past orgy & in this orgy.Now I am going to get pregnant again & make both you bastard pay child support. I dont want to see either of your ugly facesw again. I wouldnt use a handsome man like this. That is why I used you two..
the premise of an adoptive and biological mother is excellent, but the story was too short and needed more fleshing out. not enough back story, no time for the son to process any of the news, just right to drunken sex that was over too quick.
The story was fine, went a little fast, could use more fleshing out, but over all it was good. The comments you got however....there are some seriously fucked up people reading this stuff, they need to get help....fast.
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It was good but wish it was longer.
I like short quickies
But there was not enough content, you need to cram more in to make it work properly.
More
As the other commentors said, more content and a slower buildup and you have a great story.
Maybe a second one and delve into the moms pasts and slow down the sex with more details.
Please give us more
Should have came in both of them
more chapters
Great story. This guy loved the evilness of wanting to fuck his mother. Then he enjoyed fucking his mother. Then she told him that she wasnt his mother This made him madder than hell. But he kept his madness secret. He said that I already knew that you wasnt my mother, That I only fucked you just to use your ass whore. She said that I knew you had the hots for me, so when you turned 18, I was planning to fuck you. So I planned my plan on you trying to see me naked. I left the bathroom door always cracked, always pretending that I never knew that you was looking at me naked. You thought that you had fooled me. I knew that all you wanted was just a fuck from me. But I fooled your ignorant ass you ugly bastard, I am really a whore who just gave you aids.
Great story.His real mother just told him that he was conceived in that orgy, in the story that she just had neglected to mention... That made him mad. He kept his madness hidden So he planned on using them for just a fuck. His real mother told him that she was really using him. That she knew who is real dad was in the orgy, because he, just like his dad, was the only ugly one in the past orgy & in this orgy.Now I am going to get pregnant again & make both you bastard pay child support. I dont want to see either of your ugly facesw again. I wouldnt use a handsome man like this. That is why I used you two..
great premise but needs improvement
the premise of an adoptive and biological mother is excellent, but the story was too short and needed more fleshing out. not enough back story, no time for the son to process any of the news, just right to drunken sex that was over too quick.
Ok then...
The story was fine, went a little fast, could use more fleshing out, but over all it was good. The comments you got however....there are some seriously fucked up people reading this stuff, they need to get help....fast.
Too Rushed...
...too short. OK otherwise.
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