All Comments on 'Last Orders'

I found the spacing a bit distracting - but that's just me. I loved the choiceand use of language.

at conflict. I felt a soulessness in the haunting words a killing for sake of the orders alone. The two lined stanzas gave it all an odd feeling, an increased level of aprehension. Well done...

jim : )

I thought the spacing was well done. It was a perfect match to the words.