The Girl Next Door

This was a fantastic story!

I normally don't read this genre, but something just grabbed me to read this one. You created a wonderful world with your words. I was wondering how you were going to continue on after the wedding night. Well done!

Great story with a bunch of twists and turns. Really enjoyed reading it because you developed the characters so well.

Great story one of the best ever

One of the best I have ever read on this site

a most engaging & intriguing tale

imagine my delight when i got to the end of page 1
and found myself with the most enjoyable surprise of 24 more pages to read

superb mix of descriptive/narrative & quality dialogue on what was an interesting journey through the trials & tribulations of life

so often stories in this category are a big dissapointment
in this case 5 stars & a glowing comment seem insufficient praise for what is undoubtably a most remarkably well written & enjoyable book

Kudos

Probably the best story on the site.

Thank you for taking the time to write it and share it with us.

Perfect...

Thank you for sharing your creativity and being so generous with chapters. It was a joy start to finish. I feel lucky to have stumbled upon The Girl Next Door.

Please feel free to share any other stories bouncing around in your talented head !

Awesome

Get it published, its very good

Excellent

I honestly am struggling to remember when, or even if, I've read a better story here. Truly excellent stuff

Well Done!

Very well thought out, written, and presented. A pure joy to read.

AMAZING

This is a great story, certainly in the top 5% of efforts on Lit. I'm hopeful that the author will continue to share his outstanding talents with us.

Thank you

Wow. Great story. I enjoyed very much your first one on this site, and kept hoping that you'd do another. This one really sucked me in; a sign of truly excellent writing. Please keep writing, and let us know if you submit elsewhere - be happy to buy your stories if you go that route.
Thanks again.

Very well done. Please keep writing

COMPLETE STORY-- IN EVERY SENSE OF THE WORD

CONGRATULATIONS! This one of the best stories I've ever read on this site. I was expecting for Kim and Jack to get together and make a baby. Two was a natural and complete surprise. Thanks for sharing.

Good Story

I tend to like longer stories that develop more depth. Thanks for an enjoyable read.

Tom

dnf

Fucking hated these goody-two-shoes morons. I had to quit at page 4 when the faggot got a mouthful of cum. Fuck that.

Really good story!

So original, funny, unexpected twists... really creative stuff and a tremendous style and great editing... I never noticed a single edit error and basically forgot I was reading instead of seeing and hearing the story.

Great read

I've just read both of your posted stories an I have to say they are the best I have read on this site! When you post a new one can you ping me?

Great read!

Well written story with interesting characters and a terrific emotional payoff. Thanks for posting this!

More twists than a sidewinder

I mean that in a good way. The plot took off in a new direction about every other page, and I enjoyed every new situation in which your characters were engaged and how they dealt with it.

One of the best stories posted on Literotica in my opinion. I'd have given it ten stars if only I could. Thanks for posting it.

About time !!!

I read Life Raft about 2 years ago and though I enjoyed it I was always kind of pissed that you had not posted anything else. I really liked this story (1) for its' content (2) for its' lack of typos and (3) for its' English grammar and spelling. I hope to see more from you before another 3 years goes by. I gave it 5 stars and '4' on the Budweiser Scale !!!

Wonderful ...

... I'm a sucker for happy endings. There are so many in your story, I could not stop reading it. I'm rubbish at constructive reviews. All I can say is I love your writing.

Fanny xx

Nope

Absolutely disgusting in my view. I was just horrified when the story turned into wife swapping then at the end Jack said that he was good just because he knocked up his friends wife. This story should be in fetish or loving wives.

Thank you

Bittersweet a tough begining for Connor his personel strength carried him a long ways. Your description of the tower crain climb sucked my balls up tight, ladies you might not know that sensation. I worked construction 30 yrs. Worked one 28 story building, crain boom was 365' above the street our operator offered us a ride out on the trolly to the end of the boom. We had to have the safety harness and proper tie off of course, and he would swing the boom 360 around the building. There were 6 of us non with the balls to take the ride!

Wonderful story

This is a fantastic story. I book marked Life Raft and I came back to re-read the story and saw this one. You could easily sell this on Smashword or Amazon. Thank you for the story and do you have another in the pipeline?